New York Glow

 

I'm afraid that I'll become

obsessed with jewels

blinded by the light of

flashing cars

empty and shallow

but full of money

 

I know one day I'll be rich

so rich I'll be fluent in cash

but I don't want it to get to my head

when I have all these things

purses and shoes and cars and rings

 

A little dilemma; I'm not snooty

or ingenuine

but the place I want to be, I fear,

it is filled with just that

 

I don't want to be changed by money,

deaf from the sound of

clicking cameras

and sparkling Swarovski

Blinded by dreams and

New York glow

Lord, when I'm there,

please don't let me grow low

Author's Note

I didn't attempt to put a whole lot of imagery or symbolism in this. These are my honest thoughts and opinions... sort of like a conversation. Be as brutally honest as need be. xo,

Reviews

[Li Li]

I thought this was very clever. It's such a different direction than most go. That shows you have the mind of a true thinker.

The only line that got me... was the very last line. Compared to the rest... it kind of fell off. Almost as if you decided you wanted to finish it at that point, and that's what you found. I think there is more there... more options. Ones that will give more closure.

I don't like criticizing work. I hope you take this more constructive than anything.

but I don't want it to get to my head
when I have all these things
purses and shoes and cars and rings

This made me smile. Has such a "girly" way to it. Very New York. (the title stuck in my head while I read it. I just came back from there... so that added to this a lot). The last line... I'd take the "and"s out. Put comma's in their place. The flow is still there.

You have a lot of personality. That will carry your writing as far as you want it to go.

Kudos... many kudos. Thanks for the diversity. :o}

Much love.