A Dream

you are on my mind like of all of the time
and in this there's no reason or rhyme
i can't find the reason why i can't get you off of mine
and i feel silly when i wonder if i'm on yours
closed doors and disappointment
i'm yours and you're an mc, M.D. and my heart's got an appointment
doctor i'm patient with you but my heart is going crazy
yes i would like for you to prescribe me some ointment
or some sort of please don't come up short of
your love or your time because the clock ticks
and i'm runnin out of mine but i know you got my back, mr. chiropractic

lipstick kiss and stick this onto your brain
chuggachugchug, i'll be that train
i'll be the attraction, the main
or at least that's what i aspire to be
and try to be
no i wasn't hired to be lied to
because, of that, i am tired
but to you, i am wired
i stuck my hand in the socket that was your smile
and instantly i was charged with a rush, it goes on for miles
and won't seem to go away
today monday tuesday everyday all the way
i think about you in every way
i hope i don't seem like obsessed that way
and i hope i don't seem like desperate that way
when i see you i wanna hold back
but then again i just wanna say HEY
and be your friend, be there for you
work my magic, try to allure you
or perhaps it's the other way around
you see things in reverse and turn up my frown
whenever i am down, deep down in the dumps
when you come near my heart does jacking jumps
and a gaggle of geese all over my skin, bumps

up up up into the sky
the way you make me feel's better than my best high
why? why? you might ask why
why i am sometimes so shy
but i ask you why you are so fly
and we just laugh it off like ha-ha-ha
you a-a-are my shinin sta-a-ar
you're the only one i see night time del ma-a-ar
and one day we'll be so fa-a-ar away
in our shiny ca-a-ar okay
and pull a meiko, think how lucky we a-a-are

a dream it may seem
fills in between the cracks & the crevices of my bray-een
and i keep on praying
and we keep on saying and playing
and smiling oh just a smile a grin
my love is a championship, and that, i suppose you win

Author's Note

It's about a boy I had a huuuuumongous crush on. That crush has since faded but I posted this because I think I did a pretty good job on it. Be as brutally honest as you'd like :)

Reviews

[Dani California]

"when you come near my heart does jacking jumps
and a gaggle of geese all over my skin, bumps"

I don't know why, but I got such a huge kick out of these lines..
I like them.. I really truly like them a lot. lol So unique..

The poem itself is unique in its presentation.
I could relate to it in many ways actually.
Wondering if someone thinks about you as much
as you do them... or at all. lol
Crushes are nice -- well, when they're reciprocated.

I liked this Haley.. it was a joy to read! Good job!

[BEEGE]

Dang Youngn!!
This was long as all get out...lol.
I was diggin this the whole way thru though.
The internal rhymes were crazy and I could definitely see
this as something you could do as a spoken word peice.
Great write! You got mad skills youngn!

Beege

[Orlando Murcia]

This was almost like spoken word is it not ??
Either way this was honestly a great piece

I liked the part about having your back Mr Chiropractic
You did a great job keep writing

Orlando Murcia

[Water Blakmon]

Diggin' the "my love is a championship" line.

[jess]

thats really good. yeah long but what good work isnt?

[FANTASYKNIGHT]

wwoooaaahh, it's looonngg. really decriptive and honest! it doesn't rhyme that much, and abstract. but i APSOLUTELY love it. if i was a guy, and that guy was me, i'd fly up to heaven and bring you a star! :)