a night of drinking

my head spinning

i lay down, trying to stop the dizzy feeling

 

another drink, you ask

i laugh and said ive had enough

you fall down next to me laughing

 

we fall asleep

and wake up with a hang over

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

Title could also be An Ode to a Hangover. So.. Uh... This is a short poem --good poem but short. Seems to come to an end after passing out, which fits the theme. Something far too many can relate to. Was there any conflict? No you say? Well then... Uh...Nice Poem!

[Revery]

This one leaves the reader a little curious, not about the night but the final line gives a straight fact about your physical condition, but what feelings or continuim came regarding the interaction between these two in the morning.