sick child

is there anything worse then having a sick child

watching them suffer and know there is nothing you can do but hold their hand

telling them it will be all right in the middle of the night

putting the cool cloth on their little warm heads

laying down with them knowing there is a good chance that now you are sick

but is there anything better then seeing them getting better

smiling as they start to play, even as your head grows warm

 

Reviews

[Letemdangle]

A greater question. Is there anything better? Lovely sentiment.

[Esana Bridges]

Aw. It's very sweet. I like the idea that a child getting better is worth getting sick yourself, and I think you portrayed that quite well.

However, I think you could have made more effect if you had put spacing between the fifth and sixth lines. Consider some sort of separation as well to show your shift more clearly.

It's very sweet.

[newyearnorma]

thanks for the feed back i fixed the mistake

[emma]

cute. a few grammar mistakes ("there" in line #2 should be "their") but i still really enjoyed it.