Close, Close

A poem that is unfinished but I would love some feedback!!!!!1 NEED IDEAS FOR ENDING!!!!!!!

Warning, sharp, smoke, deep, kiss

 

 

Her looks were beautiful and sharp,

Her lips full and mesmerizing.

Then, as if without warning, it happened.

A deep and compelling kiss touched my lips,

But not so gently,

No, she wasn’t that kind of girl.

It was passionate and deep,

Making my thoughts like smoke.

I didn’t resist, only held her close,

Close, Close.

 

She pulled away

But I tugged for more

Not willing to give away

One kiss of hers.

I kiss at her almost lustfully

Not willing to share.

For she is mine and mine alone

 

And I hers and hers alone.

We both hesitate to move away

Afraid the other might leave

So we take quick, shallow breathes

 

Then pull for more.

Then finally it comes

The moment we both hate

Where we both must be torn away.

As she leaves, so does my heart

As if it was torn in two.

We leave looking back

Trying to get just one more glimpse,

Until we can no longer see.

Author's Note

this poem I partially wrote in english class. We were given five randomly chosen words and had to write a poem with them. the five words are at the top and bold and underlined in the poem.

What I hate about this poem is that it has more of a story feeling to it. There isn’t much of a flow to it at all. There are parts that have a flow but it is a broken flow. I will fix that later more than likely so don’t judge to harshly on that.

Reviews

[Starting Over]

That was intresting none the less. I liked it. Very different. Great job~ as for an ending I have no idea.