Ra and Luna

Just my version of the love story between the moon and the sun Their love letters/correspondence between them is what the poem consists of

To Luna, 

   You brighten even the darkest 

parts of the wold 

   I love every curve and blemish 

I could spend hours studying them 

To Ra, 

   My love, my light comes from your beauty 

an internal glow even the blind can see

   if only I could feel it 

how I yearn for your warmth on cold, lonely nights

To Luna, 

   Please do not credit me so 

for light would not be possible without dark 

   surely you rule the stars

I will forever worship you as my queen 

To Ra, 

   I am no queen as I patiently wait 

For your every move, a slave if anything 

   the plants grow and the earth prospers for you

the people sacrifice health for beauty for you 

To Luna, 

   I could never allow someone of your unmatched beauty 

to be a slave, as butterflies need to fly freely 

   but the oceans move for you 

the shore and water have fallen in love for you 

To Ra, 

   They've fallen in love like I've fallen for you 

the heart wants what it cannot have 

   the shore and sea are blessed 

they sneak little moments of intimacy 

To Luna, 

   I pray for eclipses 

Your touch fulfills my deepest fantasies 

   enchanting and addicting I tell the stars about you 

they understand, they're waiting for a collision too 

To Ra, 

   That's not long enough for me 

I pray for the universe to explode 

   Only you, me and the stars 

The others keep us apart

To Luna, 

   Maybe someday, till then wish for seconds

I must rise now my dear

    illuminate the world so they may live to see you 

once more  

                 -Love Ra

To Ra 

   I swear to you I do 

I must sleep now my love 

   Drift into dreams only to see you 

Set to allow you to be king 

                  -Love Luna  

Reviews

[Crowley]

A brave love story, I picture hand written letters travelling the vast distance to find each where we know they will be for all time. Delicate and romantic, a wish that we coul all understand each other as well as these two celestial lovers. Loved it!!!

[bella]

When I first wrote it in a notebook i debated writing each note down on a separate piece of paper to get that image in my head of real letters.

[Nipplegrinder]

This is as clever in it's genesis, as in it's execution. A simple concept, a romance of celestial bodies, whom seem to us, so interwined, yet reality reminds us that there never shall be consummation. I truly enjoyed this.

[bella]

Thank you!

[J Alexander]

Great concept. Very folky. Would make a beautiful puppet and shadow show with some ukulele. Thats how I read it anyway. I like it.

[lessa (kenzie)]

Oh wow!!!
This is just so beautiful, such loving and gentle.
Very well written

[bella]

Thank you! I wanted to take a step away from angry writing and write about a different more loving side.

[Nora]

OMG!, this is so beautiful and delicate, your writing is very well done, and as an astronomy lover i really enjoyed reading your peom :))

[bella]

Thank you so much! Your eye is pretty btw

[Nora]

Lol ( unexpected compliment ), thank you so much, and you're so beautiful too :))

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful. I liked the thoughts and the appreciation in the words. The words gentle, worthwhile and kind. Thank you Bella for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Jeremy]

Very nicely done. You're able to convey personality and depth of feeling through their conversation. My favorite line was "but the oceans move for you; the shore and water have fallen in love for you."
The feeling of longing is well depicted, and the "To" makes it seem like these are letters being read back and forth. Nice job again.

[bella]

Thank you, I like to think that they long for eachother and think about each other daily. The separation is what makes their love stronger

[barleygirl]

So brilliant! I love poems about the moon & other heavenly bodies, so this really tickles my fancy. I'm in awe of your creative way of weaving in so many everyday truths about these orbs -- eclipses, & "I must rise now my dear" (so clever!) If only most love interactions were like this -- each one giving the other credit while being modest about one's own contributions. Too bad real relationships don't display this kind of uplifting of the other person. Your poem shows a beautiful side of love that is often missing (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[bella]

I really love the idea of the moon and the sun being in love too I think it's beautiful love not exactly the purest but beautiful.

[Brigg Aries]

looks like a lovers half a world apart. creatively illustrated by the metaphor of sun (Ra) and moon (Luna). fantastic!

[Justin]

that was really good :) the fact that u a love poem between the sun and the moon was extremely creative!!! great job :)