Lucifer's Flower

Going too far

Crimson lotus on a mountain it waits

Blossoms only once when it rains 

The boa constricts around the base

Choking the peak to a dreamless state.

It slithers with the music of silent whispers.

All the way up to the freezing peak

Lucifer's flower in all its splendor

Stands there with unabashed grandeur

Enticing this scaly creature 

Its parted tongue salivates

It guides and it follows

Touching, encircling slowly 

Drops of venom burn the ground

Melting the solid blue ice

Revealing the beautiful lies

The snake falls down in ecstasy

Content with the life he couldn't save 

On top of the rotten corpse

Of his brother's grave.

Crimson lotus on a mountain it waits.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Lucifer's flower in all its splendor
Stands there with unabashed grandeur"
Very good use of words. The above lines stood out. The poem made me desire to know more. Your statements were solid and create vision and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[New Theory]

Thank you C. P. :)

[Brokensoul]

I had to actually read it a number of times and after I did, I felt I was entrapped in a world that was conspiring against me. There is something wrong and I shall be consumed by some monstrous force. I don't know what was exactly your thought behind writing this, but this is the kind of reaction that generated when I read it. Nevertheless, Sinister yet sublime, that's all I have to say.

[New Theory]

This poem is about obsessing over something, not just normal obsession but the one that leads to destruction of self. You always have a unique point of view redefining my own work to me, teaching me the meaning of my own words. There is always something new to learn from you.

[Rachelle]

Sometimes, when we want to tell the truth, we have to build a lie. And this lie kicks a far better punch than ten sermons carefully orated behind the pulpit.

You know I am not going to praise you to high heaven for your excellent choice of metaphor and vivid description. You know that, N.T. Not going to stroke your ego further…

Each of us has that elusive crimson lotus we all yearn for. It could be anything and everything. Fame, recognition, power, wealth, love….. you name it. By tradition amongst the Chinese, the lotus is sacred - probably carried through from the influence of India and Buddhism… so I am going to force myself to say it: Excellent choice of iconography made more ominous by one that is not pure white but exotically and enticingly crimson - all the more a tempting morsel for every mortal to chase after.

And so, we, blinded by the allure of this rarity in our lives, chase after it - often bypassing opportunities Life gives us to be humble, pure and true. We, oblivious to the truths, blinded by our passions, succumb to the flames of temptation and burn, disintegrating ourselves and floating away - lost to the Divine destiny God wants us to have.

And so, upon introspection, I gather myself, my thoughts and ambitions and lay them at His feet, hoping for some degree of compassion and hoping to grow in the path He has selected for me. I have chosen to see in a world that has been blinded.

My two bits' worth, N.T. Xie Xie!

[New Theory]

Thank you so much for your review.... :).

It is this kind of delicious reviews that make writing worth it. No I am not looking for praise, I am looking for ideas, discussing on them which nurtures my mind and lets me know more. Helps me see more clearer.
You have correctly deciphered this poem being about obsession, obsession bordering on craziness where nothing else is visible and what lies ahead is self destruction.

I loved this review. You teach me a lot science lady and I am a good learner. :)

[Rachelle]

You're welcome, N.T. It was a good read and worthy of long thought processes.

[Rachelle]

You're welcome, N.T. It was a good read and worthy of long thought processes.

[Rachelle]

You're welcome, N.T. It was a good read and worthy of long thought processes.

[Rachelle]

You're welcome, N.T. It was a good read and worthy of long thought processes.

[New Theory]

You are too kind :).

[Rachelle]

Bu keqi!

[Brittany Zedalis]

I am loving the details and descriptive words you used. Awesome poem!!

[New Theory]

Thank you Brittany, your kind words inspire me to keep writing :)

[Mary Ochoa]

What great choice of words! Such a big enjoyment to read! It just throws some amazing mystery into it! It's very exciting! Great work :)

[New Theory]

Thanks so much Mary :).

[Mary Ochoa]

You're Welcome! :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was some awesome writing Theory.Your descriptions and lines are flawless :)

[New Theory]

Its your inspiration and your friendship which is helping me and pushing me to write. You have been a very big inspiration always with your kind words :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Aww Thank you Theory that is a wonderful compliment,you are welcome :)

[New Theory]

You are welcome Vidya :)

[Madalyn Beck]

I love this! Very enjoyable and detailed. The imagery was profound and every line drew me deeper and deeper in. Fantastic! (:

[New Theory]

Thank you so Madalyn Beck :). Your words are kind and inspiring :)

[FlamingPhoenix]

I LOVE it--makes me think--I see a lot in this piece--and oddly find it rather relatable. The title drew me in as did every line! Very nicely done!

[New Theory]

Thank you so much FlamingPhoenix, I improve with your help, with your encouragement. Your work inspires me a lot so getting this compliment from you means a lot to me. :)

[FlamingPhoenix]

Wow! What an incredible compliment--and I really needed that today--I'm grateful to know my work can inspire another. Keep writing--I truly enjoy reading your work!

[New Theory]

Thank you .... :)

[TheSecretWriter]

Hey. It really is an amazing poem, quite extraordinary in my opinion. You combine these images and objects that express nature with some sort of confusing story. Because, although it's clear, that the "protagonists" are a snake and Lucifer's Flower I'm still not sure what it's supposed to mean exactly. You created a short story you have to think about. LG The Secret Writer

[New Theory]

Thank you so much for the review and taking time off to read this. :). I am glad you liked it.
read moreThank you so much for the review and taking time off to read this. :). I am glad you liked it.
Well literally it is a story about a snake reaching up to to a lotus and dying there like the rest of his clansmen who tried to take it too hence the mountain is actually formed due to the heaping dead bodies on top which the flower still stays waiting for someone else. It is like the most ultimate prize.
I tried to express the desire to attain glory sometimes which may blind us from everything else, we sometimes blindly chase fruitless things and it can be very dangerous. Its basically about being obsessive about something.

[melissa]

This amazing poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them a lot

[New Theory]

Thank you Beth, I have been learning a lot here from all my friends here at writers cafe who encourage me with their kind words. :)

[Beth]

Wow. I got to say that this just took my breath away. Lucifer's flower - the first thing I liked was the name. Hats off to that thought! I love the way you have effortlessly managed to bind together the words. Beautiful. Damn man!! This is gooooood!! ;)

[New Theory]

Thank you Beth for taking time off to read this :). I am glad you liked it. :)