Blue Blooded

The investigation hasn't even begun. But things have already started going wrong.

It was a long drive to main city of Merriston from the outskirts where we lived. The last bottle of holy water that we had taken was almost empty, along with the silver bullets of which only three were left, my fedora was also almost torn and Benny needed a new pair of shoes. We therefore decided to visit Beeman, he had all the supplies for all of our needs, always.

I tried to keep my mind occupied so the thought of last night's dream wouldn't cross it, but it came creeping to me. The fragrance of broken grass twigs still afresh in my nostrils. I tried to take myself out of that dream.

"Do you need anything else Benny?"  I asked, there was no answer from Benny who was sitting in the back seat. I adjusted the rear view mirror to see what Benny was doing.

It was the same as always, "Get your head back in Benny? It's not safe." I almost shouted at him.

He never listened to me. I said again but he didn't pay any attention to me. His head cocked out of the window like a dog. I tried to pull him in but my hand didn't reach him.

"Jesus Benny!!! stop fooling around." I stretched a little to reach for Benny, a piece of his shirt was in my grasp and I tugged it in.

"Get back in Benny. You little rascal."

In this little distraction, I couldn't see that Blue Cadillac heading right towards me until it was already too late. I pushed on the brake pedal hard, but that was all I could do. The Cadillac grazed my car on the right and headed right towards the tree on the side of the road, it had a head on collision with it and stopped.

"F@#$, F*@$, Good god mighty Jesus!!!". It was all that came through my mouth when our car came to a stop. Benny was too much in shock to say anything.

I fumbled with the seat belt as I hastily tried to take it off, I pulled on it but the thing didn't buzz. Somehow I reached for the buckle, it made a click sound as it opened and freed me from its clutches.

I opened the door and ran towards the car which now had a little smoke coming out from its hood.

It was about fifty to sixty feet away from where I had stopped my car so I ran towards it with as much speed as I could muster.

But these few seconds were enough for the revelations to rattle my head. Blue white Cadillac. My mind started playing games with me, but little did I know that all those pictures that my mind comprehended in this single moment were going to be right in front of me, except they would be much more worse than I could had imagined.

She was laying unconscious there; Suzi, blood flowing through her forehead had already drenched her dress. It brought a chilling feeling in my spine. I pulled on the door of the car but it didn't budge. I tried harder but it didn't budge. Finally I reached inside the car and tried to pull her out through the window, it wasn't as easy as I had imagined it would be, her upper torso was almost out of the window, but before I could pull her out completely the car was slowly getting enveloped in flames.

I tried hard to pull her out, the flames slowly growing, the metal burning with it started producing a nauseating pungent odor, it made my eyes burn. I held on to her, trying my best to pull her out, but maybe her dress was stuck on to something which didn't allow me to pull her out completely. I felt almost dizzy and my hands were in terrible pain due to the burns caused by the car's flames.

I would never had let go of her, but the blast almost jolted me out of her reach. This was the last thing I remembered; me thrown out of her reach, as if something pulled me back with full force and everything around me slowly started to fade to black.

Author's Note

Unfortunate event or is it the unfolding of something else entirely. The new episode of Urchin R Kane will have the answers, but if you dig deeper, only then you will find the answers. Stay with us on this ride with Mr RKane.

Reviews

[Stefanie Holmes]

"The last bottle of holy water that we had taken was almost over," The word 'over' isn't the word you want to use in this sentence. I would go with the word 'empty' since you are referring to a bottle of water.

Also in your first paragraph towards the end you started to ramble. I would sharpen your sentences a little better and get your thoughts in order.

"I tried to keep my mind occupied so the thought of last night's dream wouldn't cross it. But it came creeping to me." I would combine these two sentences by putting a come between them. You don't need separate sentences for these thoughts.

"Say you need anything else? Benny?" I would rewrite this to read like this... "Do you need anything else, Benny?" Makes a little more grammatical sense that way.

'Blood flowing through her forehead had already drenched her dress.' The 'blood' wouldn't be flowing 'through' her forehead. You'd want to use the word 'from' here.

You have some editing to do with this chapter and some proofreading. Grammatical issues here and there... I pulled some of them out for you to see.

Nice cliffhanger again to keep your readers hooked.

~Stefanie

[New Theory]

It's always so much informative when you review my chapters. Keep waiting for this, I learn a lot from you Stephanie. Thanks for always taking out time for me. :) :)

[Stefanie Holmes]

You're welcome! I just want to help you improve. :)

[New Theory]

Yes I want that too... that's why I wait for your reviews. :)

[Akansha]

It's really very intriguing...great job!!!!

[New Theory]

Thank you Akansha :)

[New Theory]

Did you read the older chapters?

[Akansha]

Yes,i have read them too...looking forward to the upcoming ones :)

[New Theory]

Next chapter, Violet Shade is due tonight. :P

[Vidya Bacchus]

Ohhhhh chills .This is progressing so well .I think that I am hooked :)

[New Theory]

Thank you Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)