Various remnants of heartbreak - Open Sores

A Poem by Ariana Omnomnom

I get sad a lot and cry out poems.

I didn't want to write about you

But it seems I failed at that too

Maybe that's just me

A sole failuree

I see you've opened up your doors

It's opened all my healed up sores

I promised I'd go away

It makes me sad to say

I've kept that deal

I guess heartbroken wounds never heal

Its sad to say goodbye

To my favorite guy

Goodbye

© 2015 Ariana Omnomnom

Author's Note

This isn't about physical sores, its about emotional ones.

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Confuser

Emotional pain is so well expressed in this poem. To reconcile a heartbreak is very difficult -the traces always remain, but hopefully they will give our spirit strength one day. The sole failuree is an interesting choice of words and clever; very honest and well written. Thank you. Dale

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the feedback!

9 Years Ago

You're welcome!! Have a great day and thank you - Dale

ANTO

HI my friend
This is a well penned revisiting of pains induced by events in the past. The tone is well set by the first two lines - the speaker's state of mind and overall opinion of their 'self' is well conveyed in two short lines.
I would have opted for another word instead of 'sole' - maybe 'chronic failuree' to futher drive home the point that the subject feels they always fail. (I never heard of a 'failuree' before but its a grand word - thanks for the new word).

The end of the poem demonstrates the innate strength of the speaker since they are the one saying Goodbye - allbeit for a second (or third/fourth whatever) time, but it shows they are still in charge of their own destiny, which is s very strong position to even feel to be in.

More to this than meets the poetic eye Ariana.
Good write my friend! :)