I won't leave

It is about a person desperately trying to tell the other, that even if someone gives him a hundred reasons to leave him, he won't do it. It talks about eternal friendship or love.

Knowing you more

cost me so much

but like I told you

I won't back away

Even if the sun won't shine

and the stars won't align

and when you look at me

with those distrustful eyes

I wont back away

even if it costs me my whole life

Cos I treasured you
And I loved you

and I wont leave you

Cos … that's leaving me

and I wont leave me

not till you leave me

Author's Note

I want a review on what could be improved here, and if the stanzas have some mistakes in connecting with each other.

Reviews

[Neville]

Okay, I think if you are going to use the word I .. then you should be consistent in the way you use it .. and not use i & I .. I also think your final stanza could do with some tweaking ,, maybe lose the ... 's .. good luck :)

[Mk.t.g]

Thanks for reviewing, Neville! I apprecitae your efforts to correct the mistakes here. This was my first poem here, and I must say I learned a lot after posting others and reading other poems too. Along the way, I do think that this poem has a lot of mistakes, but I have corrected them (I hope so) in my other poems. Anyhow, thanks for your comment!
Mk.t.g

[Green]

I like the concept here, I think my biggest comment is that it feels almost too overstated and that takes away a little of its impact. Like the whole, 'it cost me a million bucks' thing, maybe I'm just more drawn to realism and it's personal preference but did it really cost a million dollars or were there maybe just a lot of reasons to make a different choice? But then I'm torn because the building on it in the later lines where it becomes billion and trillion also kind of works. I just think that (once again if it were me), I would maybe make it something slightly different so it doesn't kind of come of like one of those rap songs where they're just boasting about lots of expensive things that you know isn't their real life (not the best comparison, but hopefully it makes sense).
Other than that, I think it's a beautiful sentiment. Sometimes staying is a whole lot harder than leaving.