Broken

A horse on a hill,

so silent and still.

No  word is spoken,

for her spirit will be broken,

A horse, and a cowboy,

best friends as it seems,

but only to be found

in a child's  sweet dreams,

For mustang and man,

there is no certain of plan,

it's all going free

and they will certainly not agree,

The things that they do,

to break a horse's soul,

are horrid leaving them no longer whole,

people tend to say 

that man and mustang have a way,

that when he dismounts

the horse will not stray

but in a horses mind,

he wants to flee,

nothing seems better then to finally be free,

A horse can not be broken,

A horse will have to see,

the cruelness of man,

and the ways that we can be,

for mustang and man,

do not seem to fit,

the steel of a bit,

the squeak of leather,

and none will forget the harsh white feather,

the whip,

and the rod,

and the coldness of being shod,

a heaviness of steel

pounded in so hard it doesn't seem real,

The dust and the mud

the sweat and blood,

they all try so hard,

to prove themselves,

But to who,

not the horse,

but to only a few.

the ones with cold souls,

the ones who break the foals,

It passes their eyes,

of the innocent minds,

that a horse has,

but the are not blind,

they don't get excuses

it's not like the horse is the one who chooses,

A horse on a hill,

so silent and still.

No word is spoken,

for her spirit will be broken,

A horse, and a cowboy,

best friends as it seems,

but only to be found

in a child's sweet dreams,

 

 

Author's Note

what do you think of it

Reviews

[Maddy]

Awesomeness. I loved this poem my favourite part the " a horse in a hill so silent and still" bit. Well done you've really expressed emotion well yet in a sort of nonchalant way as this is simply the way it is at the same time while giving a lot of detail and information to understand the reality of horse backing and your poem so much better.

[C. Lee Battaglia]

WOW! I never thought of it that way.
Good job!
Keep on writing.

C. Lee Battaglia

[shelbylugal]

Great piece! I've often thought about how a horse is"broken. " Even the word sounds horrid, no?

The only piece of advise I could muster up is during this part,
"the whip,

and the rod,

and the coldness of being shod..."

I wouldn't include the word and so many times. It's not parallel because you only said "the whip"and not "and the whip"not too mention it will sound more powerful and in the moment with no ands interrupting it!

Overall it's a sound piece! Perfect for open mic night!

[SheWolfNLust]

absolutely stunning, horses like any other animal should never be mistreated, they deserve love, I totally adored your poem and was glad that you stopped by to recommend the read, wonderful imaginary and brilliant penning, thanks for sharing xoxo

[BlackRose]

Oh my, fantabulous piece. :o) Nothing like the love when being and riding the right horse. But never misuse a horse, for they won't forget it.