11 Roses

a break up poem

11 roses given from Ben

one was plucked dead and now there are ten

10 roses as white as white wine

one was plucked dead and now there are nine

nine pink roses all settled and straight

one was plucked dead and now there are eight 

eight red roses that belong to heaven

one was plucked dead and now there are seven

seven white roses meant for us chicks

one was plucked dead and now there are six

six pink roses all pretty and fine

one was plucked dead and now there are five

five red roses sitting by the door

one was plucked dead and now there are four

four white roses planted  by a tree 

one was plucked dead and now there are three

three pink roses only a few

one was plucked dead and now there are two

two red roses now to almost none

one was plucked dead and now there is one

one pink rose was left to be done

it was plucked dead and now there are none

Reviews

[Maddy]

Absolutely amazing. Loved it. Respect. Much prefer yours to the age old roses are red..

[C. Lee Battaglia]

I like it a lot.
Good job.
Keep on writing.

C. Lee Battaglia

[Dusty Daisy]

I like that, Kind of sad in a way, but maybe just like the seasons when things die back and there are none now, but there will be in spring with it's new life and new hope. I like the gentle way it flows.
Thank you for the read.
Daisy.

[Johanna]

I love roses, and I really liked this poem! It was creative, and with nice flow and structure. End was so sad:( But a lovely poem!

[Alexis]

what do you think of the description?

[Johanna]

The decribtion works, though people can tell that for reading so sometimes it better to take lines from the poem to create intrest :) and a picture of some roses is also an idea :)

[Alexis]

thank you for that advice I have done it before but i think it would work better here on this poem too