only you

a poetry close to my heart

YOU

It’s dark when you are not around

So still, so calm like I have lost but not found

Often I wonder what is there without you.

That I only care for you and only you…..

 

You were the light that swept away my darkness

And were the one who got rid of my sadness

Sometimes I wonder do you even know

That without light, things could never glow…….

 

Remember the days when you were near

You said don’t worry, there’s nothing to fear

You always knew what I needed to say

But why did you go when I needed you to stay……….

 

I know I have made some mistakes

And also that in life there are no retakes

It was my fault that you went away

But couldn’t you see it was only you all the way…………

 

You are my soul and my life

And every thing I will ever derive

Please come back I promise you dear

I will love you and only you forever………

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

this is my attempt at writing a poem....please do remind me of my mistakes if any.....and please forgive me if I have done many:P....but do let me know what you think though.

Reviews

[C.M.]

"You were the light that swept away my darkness" that is a great line! I enjoyed reading this poem, it is very relateable and verysimple to understand. The only errors I saw were very minor ones, just a few punctuation issues! There was one or two spots were you phrased it as a question but had no question mark. Once again: very minor, and not even all that important! Other then that this was a fine poem.

[Sweet Emotions]

I like the emotion it portrays. It's a feeling I can relate to. Whoever this is written for is a lucky person. It's very sweet, and sad at the same time. I like it!

[Joey Irwin]

Excellent poem....I really connected with it.
You definitely showed your emotions and feelings as well as your perspectives about the person.
Brilliant :D

[Winslow Des Totes]

Very nice work! Certainly made me feel and understand the writers perspective. I especially like the lines, "Sometimes I wonder do you even know
That without light, things could never glow……." Very moving and sad, though I do hope to hear more writing from you soon I hope whatever has sadden you has ended and you are happy once more. :)