Hold the Sun For You

Hold the Sun For You

A Poem by NelliKong

I’ll do anything to see your smile again, if  could hold the sun and let the light seep back into youI would without question…. That would be such a blessing… your light shines down from the sky, even though you’re on the other side.


When I see the sunshine, I’lll know that it’s you… holding the sun would be a dream come true… it’s the light that’s able to see through, all the darkness that I feel… announcing your presence to show e that it’s real… craving for a sign like a meal. I will continue to dream of holding the sun… just know you’ll always be number one. 

© 2024 NelliKong


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This piece is you talking about things meaningful to you. But...you could be talking about a parent, a lover, a child, a diety, or pretty much anyone. You know. The one you're talking to knows. But the reader? Not a clue because you give them no context. And fair is fair. Readers give you of their time. Shouldn't you make an effort to learn how best to get your thoughts to that reader in the form that YOU view them?

After all, they've been refining the skills of poetry for centuries. So acquiring those skills places you on the shoulders of giants. Guessing, on the other hand, places you in the position of trying to reinvent the wheel. As Wilson Mizner puts it, “If you steal from one author it’s plagiarism; if you steal from many it’s research.” So, research!

Dig into the tricks the pros take for granted and make them your own. The nonfiction,fact-based skills we're given in school are dry and dispassionate, useless for poetry because their focus is on informing the reader, while poetry's is to move the reader, emotionally.

And relating that to this piece, how moved would you be to be informed how I feel about someone you know nothing about? Not at all, right?

You say you write to see where it takes you. But..with a few tricks added to your toolbox, you can take the reader with you. And, they'll thank you for doing it. As E. L. Doctorow put it: “Good writing is supposed to evoke sensation in the reader. Not the fact that it’s raining, but the feeling of being rained upon.” And that takes more than the report-writing skills of our schooldays,

So... try a few chapters of a good book on the tricks of the poet, like Mary Oliver's, A Poetry Handbook. It's a book filled with gems and surprises, like why we sometimes use the word rock, and at others, stone, to point to the same thing,
https://www.docdroid.net/7iE8fIJ/a-poetry-handbook-pdfdrivecom-pdf

Jay Greenstein
Articles: https://jaygreenstein.wordpress.com/category/the-craft-of-writing/the-grumpy-old-writing-coach/
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Davidgeo

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No one's keeping score man, no one is watching or really cares outside of a couple people laughing a.. read more
JayG

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• No one's keeping score man,

You are. And it really twists your nickers to do so b.. read more
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