Arch for Me

There’s an arch that I love about you and that’s your smile… when I see you, just make everything worth wild. You make my heart flutter like no other… then we tussle and fight under the covers, all while we uncover each other. See you often take me to different places… a beautiful oasis… bring out my inner faces… it’s baseball for you because you hit a home run and ran across all the bases while you entangle me in your electrifying embraces and  navigate my intricate spaces.

This arch is like McDonalds because I know you love it… after common hours is when things start to take a turn… like going around the drive- thru with all those curves… leave me breathless and lost for words. This arch ends with forbidden sweat… something that I promise I’ll never forget… you made the final shot in the basket so it was nothing but net. I know this arch can be a cause for distraction… but unlike the arch in St. Louis for you it’s never just a tourist attraction.  

Reviews

[Kane Hagwood]

Even with a couple of hiccups in the work ("all while we uncover we each other."), this feels like a very personal and "From the Heart" sorta poem. Not gonna lie, an audible laugh escaped me when I read "This arch is like McDonalds because I know you love it..." If anything, I feel like it adds to the poem!

This feels a lot like a young love, with both partners discovering the world around them and the worlds within them. Keep writing, keep following your passion, and I think you'll be happy to see where it leads you. :)

[NelliKong]

Thank you for the feedback and constructive criticism. I appreciate your review

[Coffee Vampier]

This feels like a concert and not just anything a heart
Of pain from a angel and bad timing for age
The youth ends with a stage
I feel life wont hurt anyone more than me
I have an ego for it its painful
To watch people love just to fall in love and die
The real conversation here is are you in love or are you just dying
Hearts only break once your youth isnt as strong as your weakness are you
In love or just part of the fray
The lay is not needed its the story?
Or is the heart too young to know?
Time ticks as a pendulum swings are you feeling loved
Or just needed?

[NelliKong]

Thank you for all of your observations. I appreciate the time you took to write me a review.

[Coffee Vampier]

I love your writings. They all have a meaning with an impact.