Freaks

Freaks

A Story by Mika Haruna
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An excerpt from my new book "FREAKS" please tell me what you think and if you think i should continue!

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The room was crowded and hot. "a humidity circled the room, most likely caused my the sweating bodies of people, pressing themselves against one another in that small place. I pulled my long black hair into a ponytail, covering it with a red baseball cap. The hat was a signal to whomever was waiting for me. One of the people in this room was going to save me. The question was, who? A flash of red caught my eye. Weaving through the crowds in a graceful fashion.

I blended in with the crowd, all of them about a head taller than me. I managed to wind though the crowd without brushing against their sweating bodies. The boy stood there, a statue among the moving figures surrounding him. Black hair rolled down his face, slightly curling around his cheeks. A red baseball cap stood perched atop his head. Suddenly he moved, streaming within the crowd, and out of my sight. I knew i had to follow him, I knew that this Dark haired boy was the only thing that could save me. His lithe movements held a grace within them that mirrored my own.

Eyes like oak leaves looked into my own when i finally reached him. He held my gaze steadily, surveying my body with hungry eyes. His appearance was laid back, lackadaisical even. With his overly long black t shirt and matching black jeans that sagged at his bare feet. My life was in his hands now.

© 2012 Mika Haruna


Author's Note

Mika Haruna
PLEASE TELL ME IF YOU THINK I SHOULD CONTINUE OR NOT!!!!!!

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Yeah you should continue! I'm left at a cliff hanger here!

It was very good and well written! [Though a few typo's, but still good!]

KEEP IT UP!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Yes you should. But if you do continue add to this story. It needs a little more detail. Very good! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


yes you shall continue!!! :D very interesting

Posted 12 Years Ago


i totally think u should, but if u left it hanging u could leave it to viewers to see how they think it should end!

Posted 12 Years Ago


hm...Mysterious..I like it :3 you should continue it :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


Well written. I want to know more.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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