Sand Castle

The waves lap at my feet.

I gather my prayer

into the castle

of sand I built.

 

The water is so deep.

I cannot swim

I make a wish

To be safe.

 

The victory is so sweet.

When the sand castle

is finished, finally

the stars gather

around the

sand.

 

The waves Pull me closer.

into their depths

I cannot swim

I cry out

Help.

 

The castle has washed away.

all that i had worked for

gone in an instant

along with me

into the deep.

Reviews

[Calypso]

Reminds me of life. We build up a sand castle (a career, education, etc) and we can only hope fate (the waves) does destroy that.
Well done! Love this poem.

[PrincessZeldaWannabe]

Really interesting, sweet, and unique! This poem also made me think of this song, Viva la Vida by Cold Play. Awesome song!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A universalistic ventured piece, well structured and flows perfectly well done