Take Her Home

She stood on the vibrating event horizon 

Strange data tessellating 

Soft blue eyes cutting through the city night

Its a strange way home

Over this colorless tapestry

There are moments in time 

When you can only take the next step

Then another

She wanted that familiar feeling 

That neon cafe back in her knowing geography 

This city was no longer hers

A conspiracy theory 

Made to disrupt her mojo 

Something she’d found and lost so many times

As the rain started

A slow fluorescent drumming behind her eyes

She made her way homeward

Reviews

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Another cool piece Neal! Going home can be the ultimate find! Starz x

[Neal S]

Indeed it can!

[Papaya]

The familiar feeling of being lost and searching for something, but not knowing what. Hopefully finding it was always there.

[Neal S]

Sometimes you just have to look huh. :)

[Papaya]

So true!!

[T.S. Sky]

This is beautifully written. I love it.

[Neal S]

Thank you for taking the time to read my work.

[T.S. Sky]

You're welcome. You're a great writer.

[Neal S]

Oh lawd! Blush

[Shannon]

I tend to read things a little darker than other people. I read disillusionment, what my get have been, but perhaps not disappointment.

Still loving the originality of words (either math or construction in that second line).

[Neal S]

She is disillusioned. She's in a place that no longer wants her or she no longer wants. She needs to go home. And thanks so much for the review! Hope you're doing well :)

[Enigma Monster]

This screams nostalgia to me, but softly. Love the imagery too. You really brought the feels with this one!

[Neal S]

I'm happy it touched you. Thanks!

[Ken Simm.]

I find this a very visual and coloured poem. That means I can see the visuals described as clear as the neon and the city lights. An excellent atmospheric write.

[Neal S]

Thank you Ken!

[Bala Gorthi]

This one is close to life. Your write made feel the thump in her heart while taking those steps.. Beautiful write with more in between the lines!
Thanks for sharing.,.
Keep sharing...

[Neal S]

Thank you so much Bala for taking the time to read it. I'm so very glad you enjoyed it!

[Emily]

Lovely poem!!
Keep on writing!

[Neal S]

Thanks so much! :)

[Valentine]

She wanted that familiar feeling. That is what I wanted 3 years ago when I moved back home, only all has changed so I did not find it. Valentine

[Neal S]

Thanks for sharing. :)

[FIN]

I love your use of language.

Expanding commonly used, mundane language into a larger more picturesque vocabulary.

Great lesson hidden within your poetry. Thank you for this.

[Neal S]

And thank you for stopping by to read it.

[FIN]

No problem; your poetry is captivating.