Don't Go

That old tin can 

You threw your pennies in

Just in case 

You have to run

Those black and white photographs 

Faded and torn

They stay in your heart 

Like the thorn on a rose

No need to worry love 

I'm here with you

Reviews

[BBP]

I loved this. Short and sweet and very emotional. Powerful little write.

[Neal S]

Thanks so much! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i have albums, i have a tin with photographs..several black and white---like life used to be...clearer when i was younger...but now, the color has been added...and i am an old confused poet just trying to make sense of all the thorns...wondering why they choke the roses...and keep me away from touching them.

j.

[Neal S]

A lovely review Jacob. Thank you

[Valentine]

Thank you. This hits home with me today and I really needed that. Memories are so precious. Valentine One for my favorites list.

[Neal S]

Thank you ma'am! Glad you enjoyed it!

[Kelly Scheppers]

I believe we always think of love as something tangible, something that will always be there, no matter what. It's good to have that kind of assurance...even on a rainy day...even when the pennies all run out.

[Neal S]

Indeed...Thank you for the review Kelly. Its always a pleasure

[Kathy Van Kurin]

You are so welcome!

[Kelly Scheppers]

Kathy, your "thank you" goes down 2 reviews!

[Neal S]

hehe!.....

[Anjali]

I feel happy to know the existence of true love...

I love these lines especially,

"Those black and white photographs
Faded and torn
They stay in your heart
Like the thorn on a rose"

It seems a happy and cozy place to live in. Well, the more people write about such things, the more changes will occur in the minds of people going through them. Lets hope the world will become a better place that we have imagined to live in.

[Neal S]

I hope so as well..Maybe as poets we can change a few minds..Even if its using one line at a time. Thank you so much for taking the time to read my work.

[Anjali]

It is my pleasure to go through your work my friend.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Neal S,
Nice to know that real love is still around in this world and simply expressed. Beautiful!
Kathy

[Neal S]

Thank you so much Kathy.

[Lorry]

Those thorns never let us forget, do they? Poignant, reflective words, excellently captured.

[Neal S]

Thank ya Sir. Very cool of you.

[Lorry]

No worries. :)

[Shannon]

The end is so sweet and caring. The rest speaks of a past that still impacts today.

Are you looking for ideas or suggestions?

[Neal S]

Of course always.

[Shannon]

Just checking. Not everyone is.
Consider the two ins in the first two lines. I understand why they are both there, but for me they interrupt the flow of such a beautiful piece.

[Neal S]

Okay, thank you. I will.

[. serah .]

~ wow... i know that insecurity that makes one want to run... and i like the two completely different images in the second stanza and the innovative way in which you tied them together... very sensitively and skillfully written...

[Neal S]

So very kind. Thank you!

[. serah .]

~ you're welcome, monsieur... :)

[Paul Bell]

Was brought up saving pennies for a rainy day. Still rains, not enough pennies.
I have inherited all the black and white photo though.
As long as you're both going strong.

[Neal S]

yeah so was I. And indeed there never seems to be enough pennies. Thanks for stopping by Paul.