"His Younger Face"
Neal S.
Full then empty. Filling again, changing again. Your poem speaks of the awareness of time passing as if our inner eyes are watching our outside changeing.
Change:
"He had scars
that he was proud of
from his younger days"
to:
"But now
He was somewhere
outside of that younger face.
I hope you continue to welcome growth and change as in this excellent poem.
blessings,
Kathy
We grow up and we mature, but we remember our experiences from the younger days. A bittersweet write filled with longing for what once was. I liked it. Lydi**
...this gave me a feeling of regret...the third stanza that read "he was empty inside". perhaps we have our youth to blame for the puzzles of life left unfinished.
~ i like the time-travelling in this piece of poetry... ~ for me, a piece like this triggers a million thoughts about the past, the present and the future... and there's something really surreal and poetic about being outside of one's face... very innovative and unique imagery to convey a complex and intense emotion... ~ excellent work, monsieur...
This feels like a coming of age piece. Our scars, whether visible or not, shape us into who we are so we should not be ashamed of them. The only shame is that we don't start out as wise as we become. A fine poem Neal.
If only we had the time and patience to put as much thought into our younger, more reckless selves than we do after the event. I think if we done a poll right now, 99% of us would see ourselves in these words Neal. Perfectly captured.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you Nemo. Appreciate you taking the time to read my stuff.
8 Years Ago
you are very welcome, it's a pleasure to. Please feel free to send me read requests any time.
8 Years Ago
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Hello everyone. My name is Neal Sanford and i'm a chef from Tupelo Mississippi. I've been writing for what seems like my entire life but just of late been keeping a record of them. My main focus is po.. more..