His Younger Face

His Younger Face

A Poem by Neal S

It was a cold day
When he emptied 
His things 
Into a suitcase

He had scars 
That he was proud of 
From his younger days

But everything 
Made him feel
As if he was empty inside

And the memories of her 
He had played it safe
Its was a long ride 

But now 
He was somewhere 
Outside 
Of that younger face 

© 2016 Neal S


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"His Younger Face"
Neal S.
Full then empty. Filling again, changing again. Your poem speaks of the awareness of time passing as if our inner eyes are watching our outside changeing.
Change:
"He had scars
that he was proud of
from his younger days"
to:
"But now
He was somewhere
outside of that younger face.
I hope you continue to welcome growth and change as in this excellent poem.
blessings,
Kathy

Posted 6 Years Ago


It is a long ride from youth to maturity, but we all must take it. Valentine

Posted 8 Years Ago


Neal S

8 Years Ago

Indeed we do. Thanks for reading!
We grow up and we mature, but we remember our experiences from the younger days. A bittersweet write filled with longing for what once was. I liked it. Lydi**

Posted 8 Years Ago


Neal S

8 Years Ago

Thank you ma'am.
...this gave me a feeling of regret...the third stanza that read "he was empty inside". perhaps we have our youth to blame for the puzzles of life left unfinished.

...a good thinking process, Neal.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Neal S

8 Years Ago

Thank you.
~ i like the time-travelling in this piece of poetry... ~ for me, a piece like this triggers a million thoughts about the past, the present and the future... and there's something really surreal and poetic about being outside of one's face... very innovative and unique imagery to convey a complex and intense emotion... ~ excellent work, monsieur...

Posted 8 Years Ago


Neal S

8 Years Ago

Thank you serah. Lovely review :)
. serah .

8 Years Ago

~ you're very welcome... :)
Geez thats a wee walk down memory lane. universal one bruv. Nice

Posted 8 Years Ago


Neal S

8 Years Ago

Thanks so much!
This feels like a coming of age piece. Our scars, whether visible or not, shape us into who we are so we should not be ashamed of them. The only shame is that we don't start out as wise as we become. A fine poem Neal.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Neal S

8 Years Ago

Thank you :)
If only we had the time and patience to put as much thought into our younger, more reckless selves than we do after the event. I think if we done a poll right now, 99% of us would see ourselves in these words Neal. Perfectly captured.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Lorry

8 Years Ago

Ha, well no need to feel that now I've said it is more than fine to do so.
Neal S

8 Years Ago

Got ya! Thanks Nemo.
Lorry

8 Years Ago

No worries. :)

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Hello everyone. My name is Neal Sanford and i'm a chef from Tupelo Mississippi. I've been writing for what seems like my entire life but just of late been keeping a record of them. My main focus is po.. more..

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