Building Parables

Her words danced 

Poetry scratched on the bathroom stall 

  of the world 

Eyes raging with firey truth

Steel lips building parables 

I knew I loved her

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"Building Parables"
Neal S,
Judging by the title this poem is about the passion that comes from inspiration.
"Her words danced' That's how it feels when something which has been sitting deep in your soul finally begins to take form. A relief too!
"Poetry scratched on the bathroom stall
of the world"
We and our reality is shared and we all have so much in common as world dwellers together.
"eyes raging with firey truth"
The main point of a message is found and related in words.
"Steel lips building parables
I knew I loved her"
The sharing of our inner meaning's essence. Then the satisfaction which comes from sharing a completed piece!
Of course there is joy and even love of the craft. Yes we love her. (writing.)
Blessings,
Kathy

[andrew mitchell]

oh the thoughts when you know, scary sometimes but exciting and just losing all control of the normality you once had, plus the new focal point in your life is now her, quite exhausting mentally and you lose weight, and you're not hungry, she's on your thoughts 24/7 lol

[Neal S]

Indeed!! Thanks for stopping in and reading my work!

[andrew mitchell]

you are welcome

[Lorry]

Wow, and btw...I'm not a wow person. First of all, thanks for giving me my next write idea, as the word simplexity jumped into my mind at the words you conveyed. Complexity of thoughts and love, merging together with the simplicity of thoughts aligning in the mind and giving us that moment of clarity, where we can make sense of the senseless, where we usually only find confusion of thoughts crashing into each other. To fit all that into such a concise piece, with no fat on the bones and trimmed to such an extent, that the reader finishes the read with clarity of their own, is a powerful example of the complexity of the mind finding simplicity indeed. Superb.

[Neal S]

Damn!! Thank you so much for this kind review!

[Lorry]

You're welcome :)

[Chase Weik]

I absolutely love how you can convey so much in so little time. So much emotion and meaning conveyed in such a short amount of time. Fantastic work yet again Neal. Loved it!

[Neal S]

Thank you Chase. And thank you for such a kind review.

[Coyote Poetry]

I would of loved her too. Create place, interesting lady and nice visions. Thank you Neal for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Neal S]

And thank you for taking the time to read it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Shannon]

The less considered aspects of truth and beauty.

[Neal S]

Indeed. Thanks for stopping in S.Mi. :)

[Asante]

Such a fine work! Yet again, you toy with imagery in a way that I thoroughly appreciate; you use descriptions that seem to linger after the reading itself. Beautiful work, man!

[Neal S]

Thank you Sante. Truly.

[None]

Once again, it is an Art your simplicity ...and yet it is beautiful and complete!

[Neal S]

Really, thank you so much for taking the time to read my work. And for your kind words.

[None]

...no really, I could almost be jealous. I am an apprentice to a shaman woman and she recommended the I turn my focus to parables and verses like yours (I think she called it Chotans - not sure of the spelling) - but I regretfully declined as it would prove a proper stage to run a circus and the inticasies of performed madness.

[Chris]

Minds do that - when behind the eyes ya find an existence that empowers you.