Void

Keep watch my friend…

The shadows grow long and angled 

We will travel as best we can here

In this place of dreams.

We breath in our fate from the lesser gods

Exhale our soul wrapped in butchers paper 

Making our way through the night as rain drops Falling down cascading over windshields 

              No direction in mind

Just out into the void of night

Reviews

[Tazeen Ahmed]

deeply impassioned!
dreams can take us anywhere...
thanks for sharing!!

[Neal S]

Thanks! Glad you liked it! :)

[Robert]

I am a down to earth writer, (Common as muck) if you like. However I feel as though I am back at school again when I read your poetry. I do not supose I will ever change, but I like my teachers.

[Neal S]

What a kind review. Thank you so much!

[Valentine]

I prefer when my dreams leave no void in returning lost memories. Valentine

[Neal S]

Thanks for the read!

[BBP]

Beautifully dark and poetic. Loved this poem

[Neal S]

Thank you so much!

[Stars and Whales]

Very beautiful, very thought-provoking. The prospect of dreams...that's why we write, isn't it? We have dreams of this world and beyond it, and we put pen to paper to present these dreams to those around us. Amazing piece, truly blew me away. Makes me think, and that's what poetry should do. Very well done, send me read requests of your future work my friend!

[Neal S]

Will do! Thanks for the kind words and i'm most happy that you enjoyed it.

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Awesome poem! A little low lying darkness here. I the image of the 'butchers paper' line is really powerful. Starz

[Neal S]

Thank you so much!

[D Connolly]

Kind of creepy; we never know where our dreams will take us.

[Neal S]

Indeed. Thanks for taking the time to read it. :)

[Shannon]

Interesting movement from place of dreams to firmly planted in reality with rain on the windshield. I like the grounding that happens there.

[Neal S]

Thanks so much! :)

[Christian Bonoan]

Great poem! this is just good :)
Thanks for sharing this poem to us :)

Christian

[Neal S]

Thank ya Sir!

[aLittlePain]

Another solid piece ' exhale our soul wrapped in butchers paper' outstanding line. R xo

[Neal S]

Thanks so much for taking the time. Means a lot to me!