Dawn

Throw away the map to your soul

The weeping lines on your face to guide me

I will walk among your gardens 

Watching the flowers grow 

Waiting for your laughter to bring the dawn

Reviews

[Hebe]

incredible. ....love first 2 lines
passion short and sweet!

[Neal S]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it!

[Chris]

I do hope you take this piece as a beginning and expand and empower it to the places it can BECOME. The first line has the power to draw and hold ...and the last echoes behind my eyes still.

[. serah .]

~ this is beautiful... i wait for someone's laughter too... and i know the weight of the emotion... it's overwhelming as is this piece of poetry...

[Neal S]

Glad you enjoyed it. Thank you.

[. serah .]

~ you're very welcome...

[Darian B.]

Woah, I saw you were a new writer and wanted to see if I could help you grow but dang. No growth needed here, this is powerful. I really find no flaw in this piece and it blows me away by the depth of it in only five lines. This is an awesome poem that only leaves me wanting more!

[Neal S]

Thank you very much Darian.