I still talk to the moon when I look up at it and think of those people I know far from me that might just be looking at it too. I love the solitude of watching the stars at night, when all around is still and you can actually hear your own thoughts and sit in wonder, quietly contemplating life.
It's one of those quirks of life that when we are young, most feel the need to fit in and comply with those around them, yet when we are older, we begin to strive for that uniqueness and individuality that was not so long ago mocked. To remain the same and be true to yourself is something that the girl should take pride in. It is only other people's insecurities of themselves that they are deflecting onto her.
Thank you for sharing a beautiful and thought provoking write.
Wow, I really loved this. The rhyming was fabulous, it wasn't trying too hard like some rhyming poems. It flowed so smoothly and I loved the topic too. Great work!
I really love the repetition with the first line and how it was repeated at the start of the last stanza. My favourite line is definitely, "Every night she spoke to the moon." My one suggestion is if you want to try moving around the stanza order, so maybe the third stanza becomes the second and see what happens, especially with the first stanza focusing on the imagery of night and the stars and then you could go into the imagery with the moon.
I really liked this. Very nice imagery. Especially the singing stars. I could almost hear their song at the end, celebrating the beauty of their friend. Nice job!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Thank you! That is very encouraging. Glad you liked it :)
"She conversed with the moon and sang with the stars
In the end, it turned out, her beauty went far"
These two lines are really good I love them so much, and the poem in all is so lovely. The poem showed how someone can evolve to be better, in fact, to become so great.