eyes of love

eyes of love

A Poem by breezy

They sparkle more dazzling than fireworks

color than radiates more vibrantly than the clear blue sky

those eyes gleam as if wrapped in silk

more lovely than a soft rose petal between your fingers

but what draws me,

what keeps me,

is the life and love behind them.

© 2009 breezy


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I think your poem captures the importance of seeing beyond the physical, even when the physical is rather appealing.

Posted 15 Years Ago


oh, wow . . . lovely little piece of work.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I enjoyed the work. The imagery throughout was effective, yet not too showy - in particular I liked the tactile imagery of the rose petal between the fingers. The subject shift from the eyes to the person behind was sudden enough to be powerful, yet not forced.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I thought this was a very good free verse and rather insightful. I love the description of the eyes. Very beautifully written.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

yeah i was quickly copying from notebook.
thanks though:) very much
oh yeah and i checked up on then vs than
then has to do with description of time
and than for comparison
i think i used them correctly?

Posted 15 Years Ago


The few errors (moe=more & check then vs. than) are a bit hindering, but I really liked this poem. It captures the feeling of looking into a loved one's eyes perfectly and elegantly without being too wordy. Good write.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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