Fair Maiden

just a silly poem i wrote while feeling depressed and on writers block.

The fair Maiden got a new, shiny blouse.

she was so rich, she also bought a new house.

In California, between many hills;

she was very wealthy and could pay any bills.

This Maiden wasn't happy just with money,

she was very lonely and never was funny.

She had many husbands but all of them dead,

she killed them with a gun to the head.

Was she a thief or maybe just crazy?

This fair Maiden wasn't like any other lady.

She would cry to the mirror for sorrows and pain,

and Godless woman, who thought she was all a person could gain.

She wanted new love, so she got plastic surgery;

she payed for it with her dead husbands money, also known as burglary. 

Later that night she fancied her face,

and finished her outfit by tying her shoe lace. 

She went to a party, looking pretty with a nice glow;

she would find a new husband, which she hasn't had since awhile ago.

Then she would easily break his heart,

stamp on his wallet and slowly take him apart.

Reviews

[a gal in city]

very funny poem..... its very good but I will give 80 ;P

[violetta york / nicki elle]

Thank you!

[Baby Ricochet]

Man what a b***h!!

[violetta york / nicki elle]

:P hahaha

[intuitivesoul]

This is pretty good, I like the story behind even if its brutal lol

[violetta york / nicki elle]

thanks! lol

[Nicky Sarti]

Sounds like many of the women I know!
But seriously, a great read

[violetta york / nicki elle]

Hahaha, thank you!

[Nicky Sarti]

No worries, always meant x

[Natalie Elle Tyler]

This is really good!! I love how u write with so much ryhmes!

It's a little depressing how she kills them but.. that's the character's decision. lol

[violetta york / nicki elle]

Thank you! It was just a little twist to the plot :)
Btw was your picture taken on the Empire State Building? I have a picture just like it taken from there!

[Natalie Elle Tyler]

Actually it's from the Eiffel Tower. Haha

[Kelsey]

I really love how you told a story with this. I love the idea and the setup, as well. Lovely job. :)

[violetta york / nicki elle]

Thank you so much :)))

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Honestly, for having writer's block, this is actually really good. Usually when I have writer's block, I seem to just write the same thoughts over and over onto paper. But in this, you actually told a decent story. I'm impressed :)

[violetta york / nicki elle]

Thank you! :)