fear

fear me not.

I'm tired of spending my time despising you

Blaming you for my attitude
& activities I didn't put my time into

Slapping you away like a fly on my knee

Secretly hoping you'd come back because
you offered me comfort and security

But there is a price to pay
taken with no sympathy

Unfinished paintings

Broken relationships

incomplete thoughts

Reminiscing on how things would of turned out
if only I asked or replied "sure, I'll give it shot

But I've realized you're just an entity
 
Lurking the halls of my authenticity

I suppose I could let you bully me

But I'd rather stuff you in a locker

and swallow the key. 

Reviews

[Tam Warink]

I sense an oscillation of phobias. Some are external and some are internal. There is a projection of internal phobia upon external objects (people, places, things) and internal goals (hopes, dreams, desires). To "swallow the key" is simply a metaphor for internalizing and compartmentalizing the phobias and uncompleted goal states. This condition is rendered with symbolism that is inherent in the life experience scenario. The only question for me as a reader is to guess if the true nature of the piece is non-personal observational or self-documentary. Either way, nicely written. I appreciate the cantilevered stanzas as they give the form an architectural that serves to compliment the jagged expression of emotion pent up within expressive voice.

100 shiny locker keys

[Nebunova]

this is a self documentary. thank you for your insight on this. ~nebunova

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and strong emotion in the poem. I like the complete poem.
"But I'd rather stuff you in a locker
and swallow the key."
The above line stood out to me. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[A. Amos]

I suppose I could let you bully me

But I'd rather stuff you in a locker

and swallow the key.

Hmmmm deep, dark but one can hear your rant. Enjoyed thanks for sharing

[Bob Sherunkle]

I truly love and get the line "stuff you in a locker and swallow the key"..felt like that a few times! this was great

[MCS]

Great read
Some times you just have to say enough is enough, feel the fear and step out into the unknown
Bullying doesn’t go away sadly it just gets worse
Complete your thoughts keep writing beautiful poetry and finish and start new paintings

[00000000000000000000000..]

Not every one is desired the keys to such kingdoms, Awesome write:)

[Justine]

I really like what you did here, especially the formatting and layout, which puts the reader in a position of being privy to private thoughts and thinking patterns. I think this "entity" we create called fear is often overpowering if we let it be so. I like your idea of stuffing it in a locker and swallowing the key ! I enjoyed reading this and you have given me something to consider too. Justine :)

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

A beautiful poem which is all about feelings and passion toward someone and I wouldn say that this is a regretfull or sorry poem to someone rather it really defines the true love here and my favourite lines of this poem are :- But there is a price to pay
taken with no sympathy

Unfinished paintings

Broken relationships

incomplete thoughts

Reminiscing on how things would of turned out
if only I asked or replied "sure, I'll give it shot .........If you will read my poem on memories thats related to this poem very close to that. Anyways I wish you luck and I encourage to write more and more ..

[Rita L. Sev]

Fear is a tormentor that keeps us from living fully - you have chastised this beast perfectly in this piece. Don't just swallow that key - melt it down. Well done, Nebunova.

[Nebunova]

With all the acid in my stomach, that won't be a problem :)

[Sami Khalil]

I like how you compare fear to an entity instead of just an emotion. That was brilliant and then the poem was like the topping on the cake...Bravo...........................Pen on

[Nebunova]

Much appreciated Sami. Have a groovy weekend :)

[Sami Khalil]

You too dear ...:).....................

[Einstein Noodle]

fear is a devastating adversary... and the first conquered on a quest to enlightenment. can you guess the second? :)) i love your self expression in this poem... one might say this or that or the other about it but i think it is raw... and very beautiful.
E.