Parkour bros

whar did that go!

i dont know boss.....

FIND THAM!!!!!!thay cant have gorn to far.

 (500 meters away)

CEEP UP JAYDEN!!!!!!

whare do u git all your energe from!!?

hahahaha! thats for me to know and u to find out bro! hurry we will pick zac up on the way.

Nick! whare are we going!? follow me!

thars what i have been doing for 7 minets now.

than ceep doing it (runs up a wall)

oh hell no!

(than jayden runs around bilding insted)...nick...where are u?...

sup!(and jumps down in frunt of him)

ho! s**t!!!

shhh. (ceeps runing) git zac im grabing some food! 

BUT NICK!!!!!

(terns music up)(listining to dubstep)

f**k head

(and walks to zacs front door.) (knock knock)

 hey what the f**k u doing? its 1:01am

we are in some havy s**t man!

who is?

me and Nicholas. (shows the money)

f**k!....thats heeps man!

i know...

whar is nick now?

giting us food, now listen....

wait what do u meen us???

ZAC SHUT UP A BIT MOTHER F****R!!!!!!! WE NEED YOUR HELP GIT PACKED NOW!!!!!!!!

f**k u man!

i meen it hurry up!

oh ok give us a bit.

hey jayden is zac comeing or what? 

yeah he wont be long....

 hey im ready! lets kick some a*s! 

no zac no a*s kicking today. we need to go find a place out of town we can hide out.

jayden:what did u have in mine?

zac: follow me broz

ok.

why! i have been following people all day!

well u are doing a grat job. ceep doing it.

f**k u guys!

Reviews

[♪Barklight♪]

you said people were being mean to you about it shes being nice by giveing you tips! woah bro, seriously? -_-'

[RainDancer1997]

I think this could be a good little story:) You have many grammar mistakes, and the structure needs some work.whar "Where", grat "Great", meen "mean", terns "turns", tham "them". There are a couple more, and make sure to capitalize first word in a sentence. This could be a good story, you just need to practice:) Good first try:)!!