chapter 1

     Far away ,where lovely green mountains exist , stood a very beautiful young lady on the green grass. If i have to describe her , i shall say she is pretty as the sun , sweet like the red roses . If u look at her eyes , u shall see a reflection of the blue sea . when she moves , her brown golden hair would wave around her shoulders like creamy chocolate . Wrapped in a bright pink dress, with roses all over , Ann smith starring at the sky , enjoying the fresh breathe , listening to country music and chilling ....

     Smelling like heaven, looking like a princess , acting like a barbie , Ann was definetly enjoying the moment , there could not possibly be a more romantic scene in the world ...

    "Ann" says Adam smith , she turns around when Adam ( her brother ) jumps all over her , giving her a kiss on her smooth , soft , strawberry like cheeks . Joy suddenly fills her as if the sky started to rain blueberries and ice cream .

    '"what are u doing here ? , i thought u had school today ! " says Ann . " well i thought that too ! but as soon as i arrived there , i found out that school is off today ! " says Adam . " but it's Monday ! ...oh wait a minute !..today is the labour day ! " says Ann . 

     With a big smile , she held her brother's hand firmly , then she said " let's go visit uncle Sam , i miss him a lot " .  Within a few moments , they hit the road on their way to their uncle's house (a typical country farm house lying a few kilo meters from the Smith's house) . 

     After a 20 min walk , they could clearly hear their uncle's dog barking . As they get closer , Ann noticed that her uncle's car is not parked in the garage , " that is weird ! ..uncle Sam does not usually go out and leave Jasper ( the dog ) home ! " ..says Ann ...

     

to be continued 

Author's Note

Nb : my first language is not English , i hope this can be taken into consideration

Reviews

[krish]

Hellow there :)
I read this chapter and it's really a nice one, the starting's great. I understood the concept of your this chapter clearly what you wanted to say. You can write continue this chapter because i think it's not yet completed but if you can... if you want to.
overall, this's a powerful chapter and i made characters of beautiful sunshine girl "Ann"... lol and her brother and her/his uncle and offcourse of his dog as well... lol

Well done, keep writing. you can reach out more by stay in touch of this site.
good work :)!

[nayra]

thanks a lot :) i am glad you liked it , i will try to become better in the next chapters :)

[krish]

My pleasure :)
Glad to hear such kinda powerful words from you. My best wishes're always with you. Keep writing and don't give up :)!

[InsanityWriter]

Nicely done. The imagery is great! :) It sound like a very interesting story. ^_^

[nayra]

thank u :)..i am thrilled to know that :) ...

[Lamis]

Very well written, loved the way you described her and can't wait to read the next part..
"Joy suddenly fills her as if the sky started to rain blueberries and ice cream" . I would give anything up for the sky to rain blueberries and ice cream! I love that part! :)

[nayra]

i am happy that u liked it :) ...and yes ! would n't it be sooo amazing if the sky can rain ice cream ! :D