" The Parting"

" The Parting"

It was cold summer night,
and the sky was filled with dark thunder clouds.
I still remember the way you seized my arms
Your anxiety scares me a lot.

whining of the air stream,
and your trembling voice deafening the night-
How could I forget that throbbing hours?
The way you struggle just to say the final words;

You're soft voice certainly piercing my heart'
Just a knife-like stabbing continually
Shed tears spilling over endlessly'
Still clouded by the fact that you'll never be here w/ me.

-natsuke-

Reviews

[Jess]

ouch;-( it hurts me badly,,,but that's life,,,that's the pain of parting,,,anyway,,nice piece dude..

[natzky]

heheh....I'm glad you like it..:)

[Whiskurz]

The imagery is something to be admired.......Whisk

[natzky]

thanks for appreciating my poem..:)

[Akhand Pratap Singh]

Sad and soulful, I hope you find him

[natzky]

thanks for the comment Nidheesh...:)

[Nidheesh Sankaran]

NICE fluency of words!!!!

[Michael X]

tragic whispers, the parting, an event that could split the horizon itself,
if the horizon was seen in a lovers eyes, romantic, passionate, outstanding.

[WiLL i e]

Top notch imagery, but if it's not fiction then shame on whomever it's aimed at. Glad you made it through. Good work Natzky. Here's to better Days

[Drowning with Stars]

Lots of great symbolism and filled with emotion

[lady france]

such a nice poem filled with emotions

[Seanne Tholltree]

wow intense drama....