Take My Hand

You may think it makes you strong,
     but it only makes you weak;
You might try and try forever more,
     but you shan't find what you seek.

Neither here nor there I see you wander,
     no drive, no heart within your mind;
Neither nature nor god will keep your soul;
     no mercy will you ever find.

The swords of old have given you strength,
     but you have cast it out for power;
The lord and goddess cast your cards,
     but you have plucked that flower.

Thunder follows wherever you go,
     yet you deny what is right;
Thunder wreaks havoc on your dreams,
     yet there is nothing in your sight.

Cast out your hand and I will take it,
     for I do not care for your deeds;
Cast your soul into my own,
     for only I can sow magic's seeds.

I will mix our blood in a chalice of gold,
     since we must drink it whole;
I can only take your hand if you give it,
     since favors I will not dole.

Our bond will be made in darkness of night,
     with moonlight to witness it so;
Our fates will entwine forever more,
     with our love evermore rising low.

Evanescent is this life and I cannot waste it,
      and so you must take my hand;
Evanescent will be your wanderings with me by your side,
      and so we might rule this land.

Author's Note

I waaaant this to be dark and yah-know but uh...yeah...

Reviews

[secret writer]

What are you trying to say here? I'm a bit lost. Not quite understanding the tone you want to put forth.

[AFX787359]

I disagree with Pat. This really isn't that dark....it's more wishful than anything....

Well composed, though. Extremely touching.

[Worms]

you did a great job of making it dark and yah-know
the only question I have is shan't
is that how it actually is?
anyways amazing literary work and a beautiful tone and flow
especially like the first and the third quatrains
once more an amazing job