Love Doesn't Need This Hate

Abuse. So rampant. So painful. So worthy of scorn. In light of Valentine's Day, to all those women and men who aren't so lucky and have to suffer insufferable partners. Love doesn't require violence.

you stand behind me

(fear etched into my face)

you kiss me gently

(knives scraping flesh)

you caress my face

(spitting in my eyes)

you whisper sweet nothings

(blood curling in my ears)

you carry me home

(one hit for disobedience)

you tuck me in bed

(another for wandering eyes)

you say you love me

(you say you'll kill me)

you keep me close to heart

(you keep me trapped inside)

your eyes glow when I smile

(your hands curl when I walk away)

you can weather anything with me

(you can't stand my happiness)

you'll be with me forever

(I'll die before that happens.)

Author's Note

Well. I hope I did it justice. I hope. Please, if you know someone who's in an abusive relationship, try to help, and try to get them out of there.

Reviews

[Gabriella]

Very interesting experimental format. Another way to do this would be to have both themes in different columns. I've seen that done before. This shows very mature thinking and a realization that there is plenty still wrong with the world. It is refreshing to see a young person with more on her mind than finding the perfect man, able to see the bigger picture. The last two lines are just perfect.

[Kawaiikitty96]

I love the parallelism. It gives a voice to those who are trapped in an abusive relationship.

[AFX787359]

Very well executed.

[ashley]

Wow. This is amazing. It brought tears to my eyes. You've captured the emotions very well. You did do it justice. Good job.

[Rachael]

This is great. in a sad way? yeah. But well put. I sure hope you wouldn't know anything like this from experience!! but it's expressed well. nice job deep =]