I Don't Hate You

Inspired by Savior by Rise Against...and I think you could sing this poem.

Break through the acetate,
Survive that falling hate,
Let's leave our hands to fate.

Let sleeping lay dogs lie,
Come fall across the sky,
Don't you dare make me cry.

I don't hate you.
I don't hate you now.

We'll travel long and far
And softly break our scars,
Be 'mortalized in stars.

Come dear and take my hand,
Let's trek the desert sands,
Let's storm through all 'them lands.

I don't hate you.
I don't hate you now.

There's nothing you can do,
We simply must get through,
I want to know you're true.

Together we'll fall down,
We'll bring a storm to town,
You are my heart's dear crown.

I don't hate you.
I don't hate you now.

I know what I have done,
Follow the setting sun,
Forgive and with me run.

The only one I love,
Fly with my heart, my dove,
When push comes to shove...

I don't hate you.

Author's Note

Notice how everything is six syllables? :D

Reviews

[Master K-tops]

You're a such a brilliant soul! I was blown away be every stanza,even before I noticed the syllabic structure! You found a way to rhyme these lines perfectly and still make each line significant. But the recurring couplet isn't in six syllables,that I noticed. Nevertheless,this work remains untarnished. Genius!

[Firemay]

Wow that was brilliantly written! Well done! loved the fact that it was all six syllables and only three lines each verse, I'm not used to it.

[Whoreable]

"Let sleeping lay dogs lie" one of the best lines I have come across in poetry by far. This is very well written

[zunie frost]

I love it !!! Have a really soft and heartfelt touch . it leaves a deep impact on the readers mind. Really nicely done !!! Great job thanks for sharing such a lovely piece if work

[Loveless]

this is just amazing very well done!!!:D

[Khaaki]

wonderful.. this is so rhymic and rythmic

[cheeeeese]

This is very unique, I like this different style.
I felt this poem was very powerful and meaningful.
Loved it :)

[Rachael]

Aw deep I love it!
Definitely could be turned into a song.. Just stick some music in and repeat a few stanzas.
It's good =]]

[AFX787359]

It's interesting. Is this based off a personal experience?

[BlackRose]

Wow. I've never seen that kind of writing before. It has such powerful words too. Awesome. Great job.