Missing You So Much

As I lay here on my bed listening to everybody talking
my head is spinning with thoughts of you. 
I hear your voice throughout the day 
telling me you love me and that I'm the one for you.

Over and over again I hear your voice 
and feel your arms wrapped around me 
but when I look around you’re not here. 
I'm wishing you will realize soon that I do care.
Wishing and hoping that someday soon we will be together again.

I love you so much 
and I miss seeing you everyday 
and being next to you at night. 
You never come to see me anymore 
so I lay here in my bed crying 
because I miss you so much and I love you to.


I miss hearing you say that you love me.
I miss spending time with you everyday.
I can't seem to get you out of my head.
I love you baby and I miss you too.    

     

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Reviews

[InterijentoWrites]

As I lay here on my bed listening to everybody talking-- Should be talk, rather than talking.

my head is spinning with thoughts of you.-- If Im not mistaken, I believe the first letter of each line should be capitalized in poems. But I may be wrong. You have a couple of instances of this if you decide to change it.

because I miss you so much and I love you to.-- Should be too, not to.

Your stanzas are a bit repetitive. The lines that stuck out most in my head are I miss you and I love you. And while that is the point of your story, it didnt quite move me to feel that way. Your last two stanzas are not as powerful as your first two. I quite enjoyed the first two. The last two need more power in the words. But it is a great start.

[Danielle]

this is really good & full of emotion , keep it up! (;

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A wonderful write...
can relate so much to the sentiments expressed here...

[JRB]

a loss in love never found,, keep up the write

[zero binty]

Throughout the fad of inducing drugs to curb depression, I chose to write. Your piece reminds me of what I used to go through, and still continue a little today. Keep writing through the good and the bad, and don't compromise your skill with negativity that you may end up subjected to.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I know exactly how you feel. I have been in this situation when you miss someone and want them back more than anything in the whole world

[_Hanabi_]

i`m not to sure about the grammar to

[_Hanabi_]

i`m not really sure how this sounds but can u guys please tell me...thanks