Deception

Deception

A Poem by _Hanabi_

I would never tell your secret,
When asked, I will always lie.
Betraying your trust is something I could never do,
I will keep it hidden, 'till the day I die.

My lips will always remain sealed,
Not a word of what was told, 
For keeping your secret is what binds us,
Now, and when we're old.

I always stay true to my word,
Even if that requires some sort of deception.
I'll spin it however necessary,
And make sure it is completely hidden.

© 2017 _Hanabi_


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Deception is hard work. Lies on lies lead us to more lies. Deception can be double work. Nice use of words and thoughts. I enjoyed them. Thank you Hanabi for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like your work a great deal. Keep it up!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


The poem shows the truthfulness of the poet. How he stands by the promise to keep the secrets of his loved one. Amazing work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I enjoyed this very much the loyalty and commitment it depicts in my mind is that if but s fairy tale I long for so dearly. Very well written.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Respect, _Hanabi_

I enjoyed reading your poem, especially the feeling of loyalty and importance of keeping someone`s secret. The feeling behind that loyalty and importance is genuine and caring.

Enjoy your life!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like it. short and singular in meaning.
may I recommend rhyming with the word "intention" for the last line somehow, i think it would give your poem a better POP at the end.

Posted 7 Years Ago


JackValor86

7 Years Ago

"I do this with my best intentions" for example

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Added on November 3, 2017
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_Hanabi_
_Hanabi_

Piarco, Not Available, Trinidad and Tobago



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I'm a competitive swimmer and athlete. I love to read and write short stories and poems. I'm big fan of Harry Potter, Star Wars, Superman, Batman and basically all Marvel and DC comics and show.. more..

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