Underneath

There is a war

It escalates

Decaying threads

Weave through our existence

 

Taking hold in the underbelly

In the deepest depths of our hearts

Is where we have disconnected

Separated from reality

 

Humanity blankets us

Yet never have we been so alone

Haunted by insistent despair

Never to be hushed

 

This affliction unsettles

Foundation cracking from the weight

Fear takes a strangling hold

Threatening to erupt

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

This piece really hit me.... It is like you took the words out of my heart and poured them out onto the page for me to see.. This is beautifully done.. the flow is flawless, the language rich, the imagery vivid and the emotion powerful.. you couldn't ask for anything more in a piece of work.. This is absolutely stunning.. I cannot wait to read more from you...

[NMH]

I appreciate your positive words. Thank you!

[Matching Socks]

The last line just sums it all up.
Whether it be volcano, can of soda, or human emotions; when it's shaken or under pressure, it will eventually erupt and look out.

[NMH]

Thank you.

[Shadow Paradox]

'Fear is always in our minds and it's taking over all the time' quote from a favorite song. Yes, there things hidden underneath that no one else knows but us. Its up to us to keep the monster in its cage or to let it out to do its most damage. You have great messages in your writing. Never stop writing. I have felt uncomfortable with my writing because I fear no one will understand the picture I print with my surreality and metaphors. I am still learning and hope you will feel more confident with your work because its awesome.

[NMH]

Thank you. Fear can really hold us back. It's difficult to overcome that but so worth it.

[Shadow Paradox]

It is worth it :) and you are welcome.

[TL Boehm]

this is the thing that is on loop in my head. Fear is a monster - and that feeling of being alone in a crowded room, this poem resonates and magnifies that "thing" we all go through. Well penned.

[NMH]

Exactly! Thank you so much for your comment.

[R Smith]

I read your profile about being scared to post here, let me say you have nothing to fear, having read just this one poem I know you are a great poet, keep posting please.

[NMH]

Thank you so much! I appreciate your comment. I used to be so self-conscious about what I wrote. Now I welcome feedback. Thanks again.