from afar.

this is too funny, another one of my introverted methods to break the ice. a poem written in resent for transferring my friend to another place in the office. lol

from afar.

distant, too far away
to say i need you to stay
beside my side
and hold these freezing hands
for i couldn't stand this solitaire game,
i couldn't call out your name.
why did they allow me such pain?
what would they gain
for rearranging the chairs,
why do they care
if i want to kiss your hair
and if i wanted to stare
at your eyes at a kissing distance?
or write my secrets, for instance,
to your lips or feel the touch
of your fingertips,
playing softly over my palm,
like a guitarist strumming a calm tune
from the melodies of my heart
but you aren't here! you aren't near,
and your distance draws out a tear,
but i can only sigh, and i can only cry
at the back of my eyes,
i can't help it. i do nothing but sit
and watch you like a star,
glancing, glittering, admiring
the beauty that you are...

from afar.

Author's Note

no capitalizations. i am not that meek. lol

Reviews

[nicolo]

I used not to do some capitalizations also. ahahaha But I for some reason, I changed instantly, maybe I changed when I had the job of writing articles. AHAHAHAHA

So right now, I have a different signature for my poems. xD

This poem just makes me miss school even more. I hope to go back next semester. I miss this kinda scenes. ahahahaha

Distance also creates beauty :) :) :) A long-ranged kiss, just imagine :)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Oh I love this... you described things so greatly, all the romance details, in need of that person you love to be more close to you. I love this a lot, enjoyed this. People can relate tho this, truthful... romantic crush, love. Really nice, sweet, cute, write. Love the emotion in this.

[AshleeKayann]

Your emotion here is evident. I like how the words flow. Like music (:

[Kenneth The Poet]

Great work.

[Jeremy Baker]

I feel the longing and despair in this write - good job!

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

You've written and explained this beautifully.
The rhyme is carefree, and I love the way you are too lazy to add certain punctuation haha :3 Thanks for sharing.

[Spookers]

When you Snape, "beside my side" it breaks the flow. You should use 'at my side' or 'near my side'

[Becky C Strukamp]

A lovely write.

[Chris]

Reasons that we have set the tone for what we feel and how we feel sets the tone for what we write. Some things mean more than we realize.

Chris

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. The description was amazing. Love from afar can leave us wishing for a better ending. I like the way you describe your emotion and desire in the poem. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[kurdapiaful]

it's what I call, SPACES IN TOGETHERNESS :)