Red Rainbow Halos

Impressions from a lovely night sky. Amazing.

 I watched a moon show last night,
Somehow

it made everything

al'right,

The sky was

emptying down universe in

its amazing way,
An expanding concave surface

breaching billions of galaxies

far away,

The wispy clouds

sketched out vast dimensions

to me,
The wind blew them past

sieving moonlight in

color tinged degree,

Red rainbow halos

appeared in the cottony white islands

gliding,
Across the brilliant half-face

of an orb so familiar

it was surprising!

The stars were mini-moons;

the moon was

that white,
The sky was endless beyond them;

the stars were

that bright,

The air was clear and

seemed fashioned for the sole purpose of

holding the figments above it,
So I breathed it in deeply

stood in one spot looking upwards

and took in every bit. 

 

Reviews

[Fantasyfairy]

A nice piece, but a little choppy and it doesn't run as smoothly as it could. Shorten the lines a little, or make one line into two and you have the makings of a masterpiece here. A beautiful, vivid poem that makes me wish I were there to see the beautiful sight you saw. XX

[emz]

Quite breathtaking... i was almost transported to that place, that time,.... i like your wordage... there is so much beauty all around us.. we are just too busy to stop and look..

lovely

x

[vanishing]

Absolutely enchanting..magical and transporting work natasha
Mystifying and beautiful dreamscape of emotions.

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Mmm, this is a beautiful poem with fantastic imagery. Awesome write!!!

Heather

[Catrinka]

beautiful - I really like the imagery you used here. Kudos ! An enjoyable read...

[Phibby Venable]

Across the brilliant half-face

of an orb so familiar

it was surprising!

great line...i love your images!! very beautiful.

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

WooooW...this is such a wonderful pice, I loved the flow of it and it ability to take me in and captivate me as I read it. A great piece!

[Phil Sanders]

Delicious writing ....................

[Choosing Life]

wow...

You ability to descriptively express your view is so visual that you brought me to the same place with you. I saw what you did. I love word pictures...

Be well

[Mr Marathon]

wonderfully done.

the title alone is great and drew me in.

especially the last stanza. it makes you think/

[Blackbirdsong]

You really have a gift for perfectly creating this poem in such a way that while reading I felt I was there seeing what you so wonderfully described. I can see why you were so inspired. This poem feels as if it comes from inspiration, the passion is there in every word.

This reads better to me that the last time I read it, not sure if you changed it or if I just have a different feeling from it this time :)