Casual Crisis

These are lyrics that I havn't turned into a song yet.

 

It’s funny how I don’t even show it, but everyone can tell.

I’m angry at the feelings I hold inside, senselessly unwell.

No matter how hard I try, it comes out of every pore.

Choking the air, causing a stir,

It’s a Casual Crisis…

 

Even when I think it’s over, I see some writing on a site.

Filling me up with hatred for love,

I curse out silently into the night.

 

Oh, how you’ve messed me up,

My simple head and tidy bed,

Are burdened with the time…

It’s a Casual Crisis…

 

The mystery of lies completes us,

We smash together like comfy comets,

Exploding into dust and covering the trust,

It’s no good to be right or wrong,

It’s a casual crisis….

 

Find the thread that binds our minds,

I’ll cut it clean though with spite and ignite the passion inside my eyes.

Give me the power to end it all,

Only then can we call it done.

 

Early morning fire burns my palms.

Eerie whispers and silent shouting disturb my senses.

Walking alone makes me want to fall,

Giving in to hatred wouldn’t make me want to call,

It’s a casual crisis…

 

I’ve run far into a storm,

Caught in the vortex and spun,

Unwound into a million fragments of lust and desire.

One thought is left, floating in the fire and debris,

It’s not you, or me;

It’s a casual crisis!

Author's Note

Enjoy!

Reviews

[Danielle Asher]

I want you to get even more descriptive of the emotion- more about that anger. Really break it down. I don't just want to hear it or read it, I want to feel it. and I agree with what Caine wrote in her review about you being more consistent with rhyming. Especially if you want this to be lyrics, rhyming more consistently could really help out with a melody.

Overall, i feel you are on the right track. Keep writing!

[NJ Schneider]

I liked it a lot. I liked the concepts and the wording. The only thing I would say needed work would be a more constant rhyme scheme because the way it is now takes away from the meaning of the words.

[thecoolone52]

ehy i liked it good job

[Athena Manolopoulos]

Hmmm. It reminds me a bit of some of my first works. I don't think it's horrible, but it could use a consistent rhythm or more direction. Not really sure how to explain it. Maybe it's your choice of words. I just kind of get kicked up into a general direction but what I really want is so see a specific scene, smell a specific smell, really understand how you feel. OH but wait. You did say these are lyrics. Lyrics always have that way of making more sense when layered on top of music. I wish I could hear it in song.