I understand this poem dear Nately.
"Sinking
Listening for the ominous
Sweet serenities of your voice"
The above lines, I knew. we wish for things, we can't have no more. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
First impressions! I had to look up what evanescence meant, but it fits nicely with the theme of the poem. The short first lines start each stanza boldly and really emphasize the words -- I really like that! It's also a fairly structured poem, which can be tricky, but I think you maintain the same rhythm throughout the piece without deviating from your structure or sounding awkward.
I think I just have one suggestion: you have this awesome vivid imagery and you use it well to affect the mood of the piece. You also have a fantastic grip on adjective use, and you pick these great colorful phrases; however, you tend to double-up on adjectives where only one is needed. For example, "Listening for the ominous / Sweet serenities of your voice" is a really interesting combination, but I don't think it really needs "sweet." "Listening for the ominous serenities of your voice" is just as powerful, just as interesting a comparison, but without the extra "sweet" it reads more smoothly and has more impact. Just a few adjectives can really spice up a piece, but too many can dilute it.
Anyways, lovely piece, interesting format, and good rhythm!
Interesting that you also use the word ominous to describe their voice. Perhaps even though they yearn for it, they also know nothing good will come of it if they ever responded.