Wishes
A Poem by
Natehy
I tried to write about hope and despair, but I'm not sure if it sounds as if it is. Do read, and please enjoy my messof words.
A wish upon a star,
To flee a dying planet.
Till a longing daisy grew,
Plastering the evening sky
To pardon a naught.
Forgive and forget for
Forevers are well overdue.
© 2017 Natehy
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Loved the content - poetic dualism of hope and despair. Can I make a suggesting to 'strengthen' the write:
A tried to wish upon a star,
and escape this dying planet!
Till a longing daisy grew,
plastering the twilight sky.
To pardon a naught,
of forgives and forgets.
As forever’s,
are well overdue.
Just a thought ... :-) PS I know this is my second review - but I can't help myself when I see a good write!
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Loved the content - poetic dualism of hope and despair. Can I make a suggesting to 'strengthen' the write:
A tried to wish upon a star,
and escape this dying planet!
Till a longing daisy grew,
plastering the twilight sky.
To pardon a naught,
of forgives and forgets.
As forever’s,
are well overdue.
Just a thought ... :-) PS I know this is my second review - but I can't help myself when I see a good write!
Posted 7 Years Ago
Loved the content - poetic dualism of hope and despair. Can I make a suggesting to 'strengthen' the write:
A tried to wish upon a star,
and escape this dying planet!
Till a longing daisy grew,
plastering the twilight sky.
To pardon a naught,
of forgives and forgets.
As forever’s,
are well overdue.
Just a thought ... :-) PS I know this is my second review - but I can't help myself when I see a good write!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Good things really come in small packages, touching without having to say much.
Posted 7 Years Ago
Good things really come in small packages, touching without having to say much.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you Jay, that is what i had hoped to achieve. (-:
I find the message clear within your poignant write - ‘Despair’ is the inaction that keeps us down; ‘Hope’ is the will to create a better tomorrow. Good poetic composition!
Posted 7 Years Ago
I find the message clear within your poignant write - ‘Despair’ is the inaction that keeps us down; ‘Hope’ is the will to create a better tomorrow. Good poetic composition!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
love it to the core... very well written
Posted 7 Years Ago
love it to the core... very well written
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
nice! but it's hard to forget sometimes the things these "people" do around and to use. have a beautiful writing novel!
Posted 7 Years Ago
nice! but it's hard to forget sometimes the things these "people" do around and to use. have a beautiful writing novel!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I hope we don't need a new planet. We may? I understand the statements in the poem. Thank you Natehy for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Posted 7 Years Ago
I hope we don't need a new planet. We may? I understand the statements in the poem. Thank you Natehy for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Ah, a new planet is well needed indeed!
Thank you for the review :-)
7 Years Ago
Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
till a longing daisy grew,this says it all
Posted 7 Years Ago
till a longing daisy grew,this says it all
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Whatever do you mean?
7 Years Ago
I was being serious 😂 I'd like to know what you're thinking of that one specific line
7 Years Ago
well the poem seemed to stem from that line,,it stood out to me the best line of the poem,and it sum.. read more well the poem seemed to stem from that line,,it stood out to me the best line of the poem,and it summed up the poem nicely
short, and sweet - beautifully written!
Posted 7 Years Ago
short, and sweet - beautifully written!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much :-)
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Natehy Long beach , CA
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