Wishes

Wishes

A Poem by Natehy
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I tried to write about hope and despair, but I'm not sure if it sounds as if it is. Do read, and please enjoy my messof words.

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A wish upon a star, 
To flee a dying planet.
Till a longing daisy grew, 
Plastering the evening sky 
To pardon a naught.
Forgive and forget for
Forevers are well overdue.

© 2017 Natehy


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Loved the content - poetic dualism of hope and despair. Can I make a suggesting to 'strengthen' the write:

A tried to wish upon a star,
and escape this dying planet!

Till a longing daisy grew,
plastering the twilight sky.

To pardon a naught,
of forgives and forgets.

As forever’s,
are well overdue.

Just a thought ... :-) PS I know this is my second review - but I can't help myself when I see a good write!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Loved the content - poetic dualism of hope and despair. Can I make a suggesting to 'strengthen' the write:

A tried to wish upon a star,
and escape this dying planet!

Till a longing daisy grew,
plastering the twilight sky.

To pardon a naught,
of forgives and forgets.

As forever’s,
are well overdue.

Just a thought ... :-) PS I know this is my second review - but I can't help myself when I see a good write!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good things really come in small packages, touching without having to say much.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natehy

7 Years Ago

Thank you Jay, that is what i had hoped to achieve. (-:
I find the message clear within your poignant write - ‘Despair’ is the inaction that keeps us down; ‘Hope’ is the will to create a better tomorrow. Good poetic composition!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love it to the core... very well written

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice! but it's hard to forget sometimes the things these "people" do around and to use. have a beautiful writing novel!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I hope we don't need a new planet. We may? I understand the statements in the poem. Thank you Natehy for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natehy

7 Years Ago

Ah, a new planet is well needed indeed!
Thank you for the review :-)
Coyote Poetry

7 Years Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
till a longing daisy grew,this says it all

Posted 7 Years Ago


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 wordman

7 Years Ago

who knows !
Natehy

7 Years Ago

I was being serious 😂 I'd like to know what you're thinking of that one specific line
 wordman

7 Years Ago

well the poem seemed to stem from that line,,it stood out to me the best line of the poem,and it sum.. read more
short, and sweet - beautifully written!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natehy

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much :-)

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