New Perspective

it's about seeing things through someone elses eyes

 

New Perspective

 

 

 

Sitting here, feeling alone

With no new messages on my phone

I don’t know what to do

I can’t stop thinking about you

 

It hurts me to think that this could have been my fault

I wish this pain would come to a halt

Next time I’ll act wiser when I pick ‘em

I guess I shouldn’t say that I’m the victim

 

Maybe this is good for me

And now I think I clearly see

The way to view thorough others eyes

And that’s when I can win the prize

Author's Note

my first attempt at poetry
it was a spur the moment thing and i have to do it for school
*fingers crossed*

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

What an interesting piece! I really liked the concept behind this poem, and the mysteriously subtle way in which you held the reader's attention without blatantly giving away what the poem was about. The last stanza was my absolute favourite, particularly the last line. A thought-provoking poem full of wisdom and insight. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Spookers]

This is good for a first poem.

[Natalie]

wow thanks guys:) much appreciated!

[India Brooks]

And you should stick to it! This is brilliant :) Well done xx

[Bethany]

Dude that's your first poem ever!? You MUST keep it somewhere special, I wish I had my first poem somewhere:)
I think this is cool, try not to force any rhymes out as it can feel stilted.. (something I am still working on).
I like how despite the sadness at the beginning of the poem you look on the bright side towards the end.
Keep up the good work Nataliee I hope to see some more of your writing up here!