Fading to Gray

Not really sure where the inspiration for this came from. It kinda just popped out of nowhere. Once again, probably not amazing, but not something I felt okay with getting rid of.

Suffering, pain,

It filled my life.

The screams of another,

Or the tickle of a knife.

So what a small wonder,

That I turned out this way.

Evil and heartless,

My mind gone astray.

 

But then you came along,

Not so different from the rest.

At first I was cruel,

Blackhearted at best.

 

And that's when you showed me,

Just what it was like.

To live, and laugh,

Without hate or dislike.

 

I could feel my heart turning,

The black fade to gray.

Perhaps mean and evil,

I couldn’t always stay.

 

So out of the dark,

And into the light.

Following you my love,

Walking out of the night.

 

Author's Note

I am honestly curious to see what people have to say. If you hated it, go ahead, say you hated it. I would like genuine opinions on this odd little piece.

Reviews

[The Wave]

i really liked this.
it was nice to see someone losing their grip on being so mean and hateful, and just living life with a nicer tune.

i feel hate, anger and jealousy are emotions that should be disposed of completely. its too time consuming. they can take over your life and what good does it do? i'd rather be happy. those happy times are what you'd WANT to remember when you're old and gray.

good job. :)

[Ama May Cooper]

I tought it was a very strange piece, the way the pain was caused ebfore the emotion.. but i liked it quite a bit actuall y the sort of deep morbidd fansitation that seems to drip from its writing ... very well done

[fallen_sueanne]

This is weird at first read, but once I went through it the second time it was actually pretty good. Good job, by the way. And no, I definitely did not hate it (honest to Goddess)