Sorry.

It was originally me jotting ideas for a story, but reading it back it was quite poemy. i wrote it quite a while ago still can't decided on a final title though. And i still have not decided what she did wrong to upset him!

 

Your head in your hands I see you cry,

silent tears roll down your face,

I want to understand but I know nothing.

I reach out but my hand drops to my side,

 I know I can never understand.

The treasury of memories is opened and I remember you

Your smile and laughter,

they seem so far away now.

 

Why didn’t you realise who I was?

Why didn’t you stay away?

I didn’t see behind your bright blue eyes,

to the pain and suffering I will cause.

You didn’t see me as you turned your back

My smile would fade and a shadow cast.

You don’t know how I felt;

you didn’t care to understand me,

Its your fault.

 

I should have warned you but I didn’t

I should have told you from the start.

It is my fault.

 

You look up.

Like you have listened into my thoughts and say,

I do not blame you.

I feel like screaming your name

Its my fault blame me,

I cannot stand the guilt on my shoulders.

I want it to end

Finally finish

End my story that was never finished

While they wrote the book of the dead and the book of the living,

They missed a name it was never mentioned

My name, as it never existed.

He does not remember me.

I am forced out of his mind

As he looks down at the gravestone

 he wonders why he is here,

no name on the front

just as message it reads:

 

Please forget me as I do not exist,

the trouble I caused will be forgiven here.

But I know as you search for an answer

you will not find it

as I was never here, remember.

he visits everyday

sheds a tear for a person he does not think he knows.

 

But I am wrong.

As he looks down at his feet he says

I do remember you.

And your name was written down .

In the book of the living,

Next to mine

As a memory of what we used to have

You will always live on in my heart

 as a piece of me that will never forget.

 Your name will make my heart tremble

and as my voice stutters out the words,

I love you.

You didn’t understand, I knew from the start

I tried to say

 but the words wrapped round my tongue

like a snake

unable to breathe, utter a sound.

You have left me on my own.

 

I spot you in a crowd, I turn

But you disappear.

Together till death do us part they say,

But you will always belong in my heart.

 

Author's Note

The grammar probably isn't great and it gets a bit sloppy at the end I didnt know how to finish it.

Reviews

[closed]

You did really good on this. I enjoyed it. very nice

[Beth]

Good capture of emotion - good backdrop for a story! :) I hope you eventually elaborate and fill out the story to it's fuller potential.

[Emily B]

What a poignant story. It will get there. Don't give up on transforming it into the poem you know it can be.

[[untitled]]

Oh sad....lol, i like in your description you wrote poemy, nice word. I liked this poem. I could feel all the emotions and today was a happy day...but now im sad...not really, i like the poem alot!! good job!

[Nathan Thompson]

Wow Little one, I never thought you could write with such emotion. Well added. I hope you write a few more things