familiar stranger.

Trembling lips,

tear stained cheeks.

 

I had never before,

seen so much sadness,

in her eyes.

 

She looked familiar,

yet, so strange to me.

 

We had never met before,

this was the first time,

but not the last.

 

I touched her,

her skin was so cold,

like the blade of a knife.

 

She mimicked my action,

she was my reflection.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think there is an echo in here...my thoughts reflected off the mirror of my thoughts...
this is a sad piece....but really cool in how you put it together....

reminds me of sheryl crow singing "why am i a stranger in my own life"--

the blade of regret cuts deeply.

[Natalie]

Thank you! :)

[Sanjh]

This is a wonderful comaparison Natalie. There are a lot of things in this world where we see our reflection, sometimes in mirrors and sometimes in other people. The deep pain in this poem is well felt.
Thank you for sharing...:)

[Natalie]

Thank you Sanjh!

[SandraDee]

Wow this is very similar to a piece I recently wrote! I love the idea, however I feel the 2nd stanza is a little awkward. Other than that it is a great poem!

[Natalie]

Thank you for your comment! :)

[AaronFreitas]

I enjoyed reading your poem :) I loved the way you were descriptive and it all turned full circle when she realized it was her reflection.... good job!

[Natalie]

Thank you very much for your kind comment!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like way you led to the sad ending. Hard to learn. You are different and had changed to what you don't want to be. The good description create vision and sad thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Natalie]

Thank you so much for your generous review :)

[Coyote Poetry]

A outstanding poem. I wrote a similar one. Good to describe a place most of us will fall into.

[Natalie]

Thank you! And I would love to read that poem sometime :)

[Justin]

that was really great :) :) the character is reflecting on herself ;) :) great job :)

[Natalie]

Thank you! :)

[Justin]

your welcome :) keep up your writing :)

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Really Nice. It carried a feeling all together. Again the end was Bang!!! Liked This One too Maam

[Natalie]

Thank you Nitesh! :)

[Matching Socks]

I like the feelings in this one, it's hard to see who we really are sometimes.

[Natalie]

Hi Ana! Thank you so much for your comment!

[ANTO]

Natalie I loved the opening gambit - it drew me in and there was just enough mystery to keep me guessing until the end (though I suspected it was the view in a mirror from the end of the third stanza).
I'd have liked less vagueness and more imagery like the skin=knife comparison, which was ace.
Good poem overall. :)

[Natalie]

Hi Anto! Thank you for reviewing another one of my poems, and thanks again for your constructive comment. I definitely intend to use more imagery in my future writing.

[Kuldeep desai]

her skin was so cold
like the blade of a knife......wow you have done nice comparison.........its simple short and sweet i liked it......but i think you should concentrate in making things more clear intrestingly...........people will like poem if there are some Catchy lines or if you are writing a poem of sad,pain which you have written above there should be more feeling in it.........thanks for sharing.......have a great day.........

[Natalie]

Thank you for your comment! I will definitely take what you have said into account the next time I write something.