Venice

Oh how I wish we were floating upon a gondola

Forever mesmerized by the telling lagoons

and peaceful overhead bridges

of Venice, Italy

You and I

Captivated by colored flowerbeds high above our wandering eyes

That hang like night-time dreamcatchers

in the starry sky that we claim as our own

Because when it’s just you and me

Following the lazy green river side

Anything seems possible

Any place conquerable

And time

It slows for us to watch the sunsets

And waits until our flowers picked

Not daring to disturb our world

So take my hand and follow me in

To a place as perfect as a painting

Where we’ll watch the colorful world

Of daydreams fly by us

Author's Note

Let me know what you think :)

Reviews

[drcornelius]

Love this piece! The images are so vivid! Not a wasted word to be found. Beginning the poem with "I wish" caught me and made me wonder where it was going. The last stanza wraps it up very neatly. Nice job. Thanks for bringing a smile to my day.

[emmajoy]

' Forever mesmerized by the telling lagoons - and peaceful overhead bridges..'
Sharing your route to one of my favourite places, come late Winter and early Spring, is wonderfully wonderful! You and your love, making dreams come true in a place that whispers magic to lovers and - how that shows in your eloquent wording!

[Davidgeo]

Reminds me of the physics of perception, the speed of light and all that junk.

In particular I liked the lines "anything seems possible/any place conquerable". It's hopeful and reads quite catchy.

Lovely work.

[Ardra]

I have always wished to visit Venice... this is a beautiful poem.. :)
I think a palce for dreamers... and lovers....

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Thank you for the trip to Italy. It was beautiful and wonderful. Loved your imagery and the sentiment and feelings and emotions you gave the reader. Wonderfully explained and expressed! Tyfs!!!

[Chrys Marie]

Reading this was like going on a trip to Venice myself. The imagery is just so vividly crafted that your words painted pictures in my mind. The sweetness flowing from this is touching. Beautifully done!

[Bacchus]

Magical, almost don't have to go

[Addict With a Pen]

Glad you liked it ,, never been myself, but one day..

[barleygirl]

This is very captivating. Being disabled, I don't get to go places anymore, so it's a delight to read a poem that transports one like yours does. I find it interesting the way your lines feel perfect in length even tho there's not a particular meter or rhyme. I love the "dreamcatchers" line (very imaginative) and I love the invincible tone in these two lines: "Anything seems possible
Any place conquerable" . . . and I know that feeling where you feel you could fly. This leaves the reader with a hopeful feeling. I love it.

[Addict With a Pen]

I'm so glad you like it! I've always dreamt of going to Italy...but all it has even been is a dream. I've always like the flowerbeds, and the way they hang, so dreamcatcher seemed the right fit :) I'm glad this poem took you somewhere as beautiful as Venice, Italy. Thank you for reviewing barleygirl :)

[RannunculusBlooms]

I LOVE THIS!! its honestly making me want to go to Venice! i love the emotion in this poem as well!!

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you so much!! I appreciate it :)

[Nigel Newman]

Hi Addictwithapen - Venice is a very very special place, and this poem showcases your deep fondness for it and the way it can change one's perspectives. Nicely done, Nigel.

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you for reading Nigel :)