Forest of Her Eyes

It was easy

Getting lost in the forest of her eyes

Being tangled and twisted

In her variety of vines

Wondering how I had not seen

Her curious stare of

Evergreen before

Because her eyes

Are nature’s finest works of art

A maze and a riddle

One I learned to love by heart

Because I love being lost

In her everlasting stare

In her forest of green

Author's Note

Let me know what you think...I was having trouble with this one

Reviews

[Nipplegrinder]

Yeah. This one is just so.
I love it.
"Her variety of vines".
So much depth, in those four words.
Wonderfully penned.

[Ardra]

Are nature’s finest works of art
A maze and a riddle
One I learned to love by heart
Because I love being lost
In her everlasting stare
In her forest of green


wow :) i loved the way you have described her eyes... your poems always reaches out to me..
and am glad i came across this one,
reading a beautiful poem is a good way to start the day :)

but i prefer blue eyes over green always have.. :P

[barleygirl]

This is so packed with imagery, I felt the limbs brushing my skin as I read. Everything about this is brilliant & cohesive as an extended metaphor. Some of your word choices convey a ton of sensory impact. Very well crafted!

[Addict With a Pen]

Thanks for reading! I'm glad you liked the imagery :) I love green eyes

[barleygirl]

I love when a writer can say "I love green eyes" without using the common primary color "green"!

[RannunculusBlooms]

I love this piece!! the theme and all the forest analogies are 10/10!!

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you!

[Ashley]

I like it, don't really have anything to add but it's nice

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you for reading :)

[William Liston]

Although your author's note said you had trouble with this one, I certainly couldn't tell as I read. Every line flowed seamlessly into the next and every description felt light and natural. I loved your metaphors and how you built on them throughout the piece. Overall, nicely penned.

A minor quibble: I find the word "gorgeous" in the last line of the first stanza redundant. In my opinion, words such as that (gorgeous, pretty, beautiful, etc.) rarely add anything to a piece. I think the warm feel of the poem as well as the beauty of an evergreen in itself convey the thought without you having to call it gorgeous.

- William Liston

[Addict With a Pen]

Thank you, for the suggestion and review :) I appreciate it!