My God... so many beautiful lines, I just can't pick a favorite! This was a fantastic yet emotional roller coaster ride, I felt every line resound in my heart - the last lines are simply heartbreaking. And the imagery is just brilliant. To say that I enjoyed this is an understatement because, truly, I couldn't stop thinking about this long after I read it; my mind just kept drifting back to your work! Beautiful and engaging, outstanding work.
You sent a friend request, I remembered your pen name here & now I see you haven't posted for 3 years. So going back, this is the first thing I find of yours to read & I have to say -- I sure hope you will be back to stay a while! This is great writing. Usually I hate heartbreak poems becuz they are so predictable, typical imagery, etc. Your poem is the polar opposite of that, very fresh, original, unexpected, & dripping with authenticity as if spoken in a childlike way (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
"Oh how much fun it would be to cover myself
From head to toe in wax
Not thinking about the consequences
The aftermath
As the wax leaves my right hand fingers stained blue
And my regretful eyes grow puffy with tears
As I try to scrub the faded colors away"
Pain is strong emotion. Your poem feels like throw away all garbage from the soul. Like desire to be clean and start new path. Each word have own power and together make very strong piece well done
My God... so many beautiful lines, I just can't pick a favorite! This was a fantastic yet emotional roller coaster ride, I felt every line resound in my heart - the last lines are simply heartbreaking. And the imagery is just brilliant. To say that I enjoyed this is an understatement because, truly, I couldn't stop thinking about this long after I read it; my mind just kept drifting back to your work! Beautiful and engaging, outstanding work.
I totally agree with AliciaB in regards to the way you carry through with the crayon box metaphor. The very thought of one person in a relationship living so much less than the other is unbearable and as much as it absolutely sucks to be in the position of unrequited love, I think this kind of relationship hurts even more. Never knowing when the other is just going to move on is terrible. I really hope this isn't what you are going through because I know how much it hurts. Great poem though, enjoy isn't really the right word for a poem like this but I felt it deeply
Are you searching for purpose?
Then write something, yeah it might be worthless
Then paint something, then it might be wordless
Pointless curses, nonsense verses
You'll see purpose start to surfac.. more..