She's an angel

She's the sound angel in my world of darkness.

You are everything to me

The one splash of color in my world full of grey

The only sound angel in the troubled world we call home.

You’re different.

I’ve never seen you cry

Your wings shield you from the dark rain clouds that form as thoughts

Inside our brains, telling us to give up

As they kill off the mindful like a plague.

The world’s black paint doesn’t seem to touch your beautiful skin

The rainy days never seem to affect you like they affect me

Because your wings are pure

And mine are torn.

A beautiful bubble of purity surrounds you

One I’ve been searching for

Because mine’s been popped abruptly

By demons in disguise.

You’ve got everything I used to have

And more.

I fell in love with you

Because you saw more than a broken heart when you looked my way

You brushed off my tears

And noticed my smile.

It’s up to me now

To keep your bright wings a beautiful white

I’ll keep you safe from this world full of broken hearts.

Because it’s all too familiar to me.

Reviews

[William Liston]

I loved this piece; even though describing a woman as an angel isn't original, I still enjoyed the emotional side of this piece. As for JayG's review, I agree with it in a sense, but in my opinion, poetry is not subject to the same rules that fiction is. In my opinion, the linkages of decriptions to events is not necessary in poetry because sometime, literary devices such as metaphors, similes,...etc. can create the emotional impact. Read the lyrics to Bette Midler's song "The Rose" and you'll know what I mean, or read Paul Laurence Dunbar's poem "We Wear the Mask" and you'll see my point. I think you did well with this piece.

-William Liston

[April Showers]

Quite lovely. It's a subtle romantic undertone. Full of love that endures.

[Emily]

Love the way you ended it!!
Keep it up!!

[Nisreen]

Protecting someone you love is the ultimate sentiment in life
Seeing her as an angel

Pretty sweet write

[Shabeeh Haider]

beautifully written. An angel can change your life and fill it with beauty and colour.

[Miss Sharon]

What a beautiful love poem this is! I do hope it is a true story from your life and also hope you continue to have happiness with your angel. ~Sharon

[T. Edana Talbott]

This was very, very beautiful. This angel is extremely loved.

"The world’s black paint doesn’t seem to touch your beautiful skin
The rainy days never seem to affect you like they affect me
Because your wings are pure
And mine are torn."

Those were my favorite lines. So beautiful.

[Darian B.]

While I agree with JayG in a way, I think there is something to be said about a poem that isn't so much emotional as it is relatable. He kept comparing poetry to fiction, but this isn't fiction. These are solemn and sincere feelings and that holds emotional weight as it is. Maybe this won't make someone weep or laugh, what it will do is make people understand. I say it holds high value as it is. Nice work

[Indra Neil]

A profound write with vivid imagery! Well done! The ending was superb! :-)

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Very wide and deep. Words almost make legendary story. It s have poetic mood. and make read to fly high above. Great job.