Here, there!

be careful in reality! may all will be false, may all will be right! thanks for my kind helper!

Here, there!

Nice memories of a childhood,
Happy, laughing or naughty.
No darkness, no guilt, or painful soul

Being an adult, emotions are gaining,
Time for our childish ways to be changing.
Just like the seasons rushing by. 

Some want to know themselves.
Some want to know others.
Some want to simply be lovers.

Distance of the downfall,
though we must stand like a wall, 
because soon enough death shall come to call.

Please keep, wish, or wait.
Remember your first sight
In the end, again we will reach the light.
Shining, shining ever so bright.

Here, there! Difference where?

You know better, my dear!

 

 

 

Author's Note

review free and honestly, if you liked it.

Reviews

[anne]

such a nice write... :))...

[Arman]

thank you!

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Reminiscence. Digs a lot of memories from here and there.
Neatly expressed.
Thumbs up!

[Arman]

thanks for your time!

[Emily L]

I like how you used the words,"here there!" it really catches the readers attention and engages them. Great words!

[Arman]

thanks so much dear Emily for your time!

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing usage of words.
"Here, there! Difference where?
You know better, my dear!"
I liked how the words dance and held meaning. The above lines were perfect movement of words and thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Arman]

thank you Coyote for this encouraging review!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Maya Tripathi]

Wow, that was really good! It really gives perspective to the progressive change between childhood to adulthood.

[Arman]

i really appreciate it!

[A Humble Poet]

It sounds great, I like how people can really connect to what you are saying!

[Arman]

thank you so much!

[wordman]

something to think about for sure

[Arman]

thanks for your time!

[JayG]

You're writing this for yourself. And for you, every line has meaning, because you have both context and intent. But you have a difficult task. Using only the words you select and place, your goal is to cause someone you will never meet, to react emotionally, in the way you choose. You have to make that reader laugh, or cry—or both. But not only don't you know them, they probably have a different background, education, culture assumptions, and maybe a different gender outlook. So influencing them, making them feel, is, to put ot kindly, a b***h. So you can't simply address and mention your own feelings.

You might want to dig more deeply int the norms of structured poetry. Take a look at the excerpt from Stephen Fry's, The Ode Less Traveled, on Amazon. I think it would be a great help.

[Arman]

i really appropriate it, your right! but all want to share there own experience or emotions. i know about that differences, thank you!
yes its a great help!

[WritingAnchor]

"Distance of the downfall, though we must stand like a wall, because soon enough death shall come to call." Love this line. Nice Work!

[Arman]

thank you!

[Diane]

Agreed. That was a line that sticks with you.

[Arman]

that is ok! thanks

[Bigdreams]

I can relate so much ,,nice work!

[Arman]

thanks so much!